I believe.
S ometimes I question.
T imes I wonder.
A nd still I believe.
N ever accepted blindly.
D eath has made me reconsider.
A nd still I believe, Why?
T he answers are everywhere.
T he smile of an innocent child.
H ugs from your mother.
E very rainbow you see.
D aily sunsets of vivid color.
O cean waves of azure blue.
O ld soldier's tears when they see Old Glory.
R ose blossoms as they burst into bloom.
A fter rain songbird conversations.
N orthern lights with emerald glimmer.
D awn's glorious sunrises with someone you love.
K eep these all in mind.
N ever forget God's beauty.
O pen your heart.
C ontinue to look for His love.
K eep Him in everything you see and hear.
The Text Scripture I used is:
Revelation 3:20 KJV
Behold, I stand at the door, and knock: if any man hear my voice, and open the door, I will come to him, and will sup with him, and him with me.
Author notes
This is a link to a picture that was inspired by this Scripture:
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Written May 28th, 2006
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- Christian Contest by pattyann4500.
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I agree with Nam. It is unnecessary to place a space between the words and the initial letter of the word. An acrostic should be undetected. It should read so that no one sees it as being a form until the very end or another read through. Yours is written with a truth that only few have experienced. Thank you for this entry. I wish you well in all you choose to undertake in life.
Much Love ♥
Renee
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Two things right off that bother me.
1. Acrostics shouldn't be so simple to figure out. The spacing isn't really needed. If one actually read the piece, carefully, and with the intention of actually "reading the poem", then they'd notice it's an acrostic. Using the spaces just seems useless; which is why I never space my acrostics.
I mean, some people write end-word acrostics, they'd look sort of silly with the spaces at the end, just like they do at the beginning.
2. The constant periods at the end of every single (well, almost every single) line. This isn't prose. It's a poem. Poems do not have to have proper punctuation, and really: I don't believe a period at the end of each line is even proper grammar to begin with. They aren't sentences (or supposed to be) they are lines. At least that's my whole perception on poetry.
I've read hundreds of thousands of poems, and I mainly only read prior to 1950, and I've never come across poems before 1950 that were written with a period at the end of each line; perhaps they are out there, but, I haven't read one yet.
Punctuation is a big deal, but, in poetry it's not that big of a deal.
A good example in your poem to use would be the lines:
"Times I wonder.
And still I believe."
(I corrected the spacing)
Though the word "and" can begin a sentence, here I don't believe it is. I believe a comma would go at the end of the first, not a period, or nothing at all. It could read as an enjambment.
"Old soldier's tears when they see Old Glory." - I don't believe "soldier's" is correct when you say later in the line "they". I believe it would be "soldiers". I could be wrong.
What you wrote doesn't really seem to go exactly with the verse you're taking it from. I mean, the subtle idea of it is there, but, it's really not a poem off the quote. My Great-Grandmother wrote poems off sections of the Bible and she actually wrote off the verse, using the verse in her work (not the actual verse but the meaning of them) to accentuate what was stated. I don't believe you really are expressing the quote.
Other than that, it's a nice piece.
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What a great verse and picture. Did you notice that there is no outside doorknob? For Christ to enter into our heats, our homes we must open the door to him. I really liked your acrostic form, and use your own observations of nature to strengthen your belief.
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Freed by Mercy
Thank you for your wonderful comments about my acrostic. And yes I did notice that there is no doorknob. I used to do retreats for High School Seniors at our church and this was one of my favorite verse to use along with the picture. It really seemed to touch the kids.
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An enjoyable piece...
An enjoyable piece; I wish you well in the contest. --Joe
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Thank you for stopping by to read and comment on my poem.
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I had to come back.
I had to come back to this as it was indeed a very inspiring write. -
Wow that is so weird! I JUST heard about that verse today! I swear for the life of me I can't remember where I heard it, I think it might have been during church but I remember thinking to myself how I liked the verse and how amazing it was.
It's neat how you spoke about WHY we should open our heart adn what can help us believe why we should. This reminds me of my own poem: I See Jesus. Not exactly the same, but it's about seeing Jesus in everyday life. I like how you did it in an acrostic though. Nice. WHat did you mean by: Death has made me reconsider? Jesus' death or a personal experience with death yourself? Just curious.
I like the examples you gave of how we can see God's glory, and i like hoiw you kind of summed up the theme of the poem in the third to last verse. Nice! Very pretty. Thank you so much for entering! Great verse to write a poem about!
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loveasyouareloved
Thank you so much for your wonderful and kind comments about my poem. I am very gald that you enjoyed it. The death I am refering to was the loss of a loved,my sister actually.
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Lovely accrostic.
I have always liked the story where he is standing at the door and knocking. You put an very inspirational twist to this with your accrostic. -
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CountryCousin
Thank you so much for your lovely comments. I am glad that you enjoyed my poetry.
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You never cease to amaze me! This acrostic is lovely, and I usually cringe at the sight of one.
I find them so difficult to write, and yet yours flows with beauty and grace.
Your presentation is lovely, and your words are strong and confident. The verse you chose is one of my favorite, for I, too, search for the sound of the knocking at the door. I'm so glad you entered this in my contest, my friend. Good luck in the contest. Hugs, Patricia
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pattyann4500
Thank you so much for your wonderful words about my poem. I have always liked this vesre ever since I was a little child. I think that it is this verse that actually brought me to the Lord many years later. -
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I certainly understand how this verse would bring someone to Christ. I'm so glad to read a poem written with this verse.
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Thank you so much for your comments and thank you for hosting this contest.
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Throughout these days it was so wonderful and so delightful to see your names and wonderful poems in the list. I thank you all dearly for being a part of this contest and making 'nansie' say WoW and after reading your poems even I cried 'Wow'. Chosing just three from all those is so difficult but after all it is the part of the game. Just as a Hindi song,
"Sunte The Hum Yeh Zindagi, Ghum Aur Khushi Ka Khel Hai,
Humko Magar Aaya Nazar Yeh Zindagi Woh Khel Hai,
Koi Sab Jeete Sab Koi Haar De."
(in English)
We have been listening that life is the game of joy and sorrow,
But we came to realise that life is such a game,
Where some win all and some lose all.
I express my heart gratitude to all the poets, you all were excellent.
Thanks to all,
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Thank you so much for your comments Kyrie Eleison. I am glad that you enjoyed it.
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Thank you very much for entering my contest, this is a wonderful acrostic.
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Thank you so much for your comments losinmymind. They are truely appreciated.
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This is such a beautiful acrostics. It is very inspirational too. I really enjoyed reading this piece. Keep up the awesome poetry!!! Thank you for entering my contest.
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This was a beautiful acrostic. Unfortunately, I have to remove you from the contest though. You did not include 'allpoetry' in your authors comments box. Thank you for entering, it was a joy to read. Make sure you read and follow the rules of all the contests you enter.
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Thank you so much for your comments Samplette. Your comments are greatly appreciated.
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You did a wonderful job with this spiritual acrostic, thank you very much for entering the contest.
Sam
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Thank you so much for the kind words lgodina . You are so right it is a wonderful feeling to know you always have a friend, the best friend you could ever ask for because He always accepts you where you are at.
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Wow you did an awsome job on this writing, very clever, Kudos to you on this piece. Isn't it nice to know that through Jesus Christ we all, if one wants too, get to partake in the special event when we accept Jesus Christ as our Lord and Savior. Let him Reign forever.
GODS GRACE AND BLESSING ON YOU AND YOUR FAMILY LAURA
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Thank you for the comments on my poem Gwenevere. Your kind words are very much appreciated.
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I can understand that death would make you reconsider but we never truly die, just move on to a happoer place.Great Acrostic.Good luck in the contest, Ros
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