Softly I cried when you left me
I thought that we always would be
My heart and soul shriveled and died
When you left me softly I cried
Tears of despair sheer disbelief
Will I ever banish my grief
Aware that you'll never be there
Sheer disbelief tears of despair
Softly I cried despondently
Gone forever the ecstasy
My happiness ever denied
Despondently softly I cried.
Author notes
Written May 28th, 2006
Swap Quatrain.One or nore Quatrains, rhyme scheme aabb, ccdd etc.First and last lines of each Quatrain are swapped, words rearranged.
Poem about sadness.
In a list
A contest entry
- Love's Labours Lost by TheClosestThing.
400 points, ended August 3, 2006, 18 entries
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Comments
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I like the unique format of this poem...it also shows true emotions thanks for enteringmy contest much love, Raneika
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I really like this form. It makes each stanza seem almost circular in the way they flow together. Your syllable count is also dead on and your choice of words are clear, appropriate, and well chosen. I honestly can't find anything to complain though not for lack of looking. Well written! Thanks for entering the contest and good luck.
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Okay, you get applause too but I have none left today so I'll give you some tomorrow.
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Ah so emotional. The rhyming in this is good, and I think everyone can relate. The first and last lines of the stanzas corresponding how they do is brilliant!
Thanks for entering,
Haley~ -
Brilliant Work
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I loved this it was full of emotion and it was such a great write I liked how it was short but had so many emotions great write keep up the great work
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Beautiful work as your usual. Thank you for entering the contest.
Sam
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wow....that was so beautiful....you have great talent. i've never read anything in this form before....i really loved it....you have such a wonderful way with words. great job and good luck in the contest.
Hidden Angel
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Wow, beautiful poem. The rhyming flows nicely, a bit jagged in some areas, but still beautiful. I can't get that line out of my head, "Tears of despair sheer disbelief."
Wow. What can I say? That is wonderful and emotional.
Great job!
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