Half/////////////////////way
around the////////////////world you
are and still you////////are here with me.
Two souls, bound by fate, masquerade upon
the constellations that adorn the night sky. Eyes
locked in deep gaze as energies entwine becoming
mirrored reflections. Individual emotions and thought
blend together in unison forming a unique singularity.
Hearts are stitched and sewn and woven into a gentle
blanket of undeniable love and trimmed with total
unconditional trust. As two descend beneath a
lacy veil of knowledge a new path is drawn.
Now taking to flight upon an unknown
journey they emerge within the
silken wraps of wisdom as
one. Enveloped within
one another they
soar through
space and
time.
Author notes
For Blazing White Wolf
FOREVER REMEMBERING MACKIE
Written May 27th, 2006
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I've been looking at some of your shape poetry and I think these are amazingly cool, and the way your words flow into them are even better. I can't wait to check out some more of these. Thanks for sharing them.
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Beatiful and very sweet... full of emetion!
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Wow! So deep and moving! It was very well written! Your a great poet! Thanks so much for entering my contest and good luck! You did a great job! My favourite lines were Thanks again and good luck!
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Wow! Well done! I love the shape the words make! And the font and link colors really inforce the idea of space and constellations!
Good luck!
-Dlvvanzor -
I ABSOLUTEY LOVED IT!!! i also love the heart idea! i loved it i loved it i loved it! you did a great job thanks for entering and i give you the best of luck! Thanks again!!!! *god blesS*~kelc
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awesome imagery.
great shape -
I like this, but it seemed a little too flowery for my taste. I liked the format though, it was creative. The picture also matched your words perfectly. It seems like you took a lot of time choosing your words and they all flowed very nicely.
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Thank you very much for entering my contest!! I loved the picture and the form that you put the poem in. What a cool idea! This piece was lovely and elegant.
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Thank you for entering my contest THE GREATEST LOVE... I love the heart shape and the images you use to conjur a tapestry woven intergalactically through time and space. Thank you for following the rules. Good luck in the contest.
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I'm speechless as well.
Beautiful, brilliant, amazing. I loved that you made it figural, but your words stood out beyond the shape. Don't know what else to say, but...fantastic!
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Wow! I was absolutely captivated by the description in this piece. So beautiful. So poetic. And so classic. I find myself bored of classic love-type poems usually, but you made this a total joy to read.Simply irresistible.
amazing well done! -
Wow.. That is brilliant! Love the heart shape.
Keep up the fantasic work. XX -
WOW! You got alot of applauds! Awesome job. Your deserve everyone because this piece is just great!
Thank you very much for entering and good luck!
Soul Writer
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Darling
Again you are honored for your magnificent skills. I applaud madly.
Smoosh
Janet -
Awe! A Heart-y piece, sis! (even though I know you don't particularly like doing shape poems ('concrete poems'), you do them with aplomb!)
and great choice in picture, too...
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This is such a perfect; touching tribute. Your imagery is amazing; you form such a real, touching, soft picture in the reader's mind. I don't normally like shape-poetry (I don't know the correct term for this form) but when it's done this skillfully; it's a beautiful thing- your chosen shape does not make the poem physically difficult to read, nor does it interrupt the wonderful rhythm you create to enhance the mood.
Freat write, congrats on your gold
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oh how beautiful
the words and the lay out of this poem
its realy wonderful
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Superb
Exquisite; absolutely beautiful colouring and shape - an artist's hand at work here, in every sense of the word. A joy to find, thank you! -
Excellent
This is a lovely poem with a lot of sensitivity. The heart shape is adorable -
You celtic moon are such an insperation to all of us here at ap
When we see the work and the skill crafted into each of your beautiful poems it pushes us into wanting to be even more artistical and free with our poetry this is a very beautiful poem very sweet and heart felt and the heart shape is just wow amazing.thank you for allowing me to read and comment on your work .. -
Wow. Im speechless. Its Brilliant!
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very nice! i like it, especially how you done the shape of the heart. very good!
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this is a really good poem, but how'd you get it into the shape of a heart? Seems like it would take a really long time... anyhoo, this is a really good write, keep at it!!!!
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breathe taking
both your writing form and the way you shape the words, both visually and in the mind, is simply amazing. i love this peice and i admire your passion and artistic talent. amazily good job.
~miss sidra sibella -
Excellent
This is a most beautiful write! The person to whom this was written for should truly feel honored and thrilled by this amazing piece of poetry! Very much enjoyed; thank you for sharing! -
First-class work
A beautifully fashioned poem which is a pleasure to read. I love the fusion of love and cosmic images employed here.
Excellent work.
Regards,
Bad Bill -
applaud this great piece
I hgope this is your journey, I have one of my own with my true love and the words were so inspiring to me. Your heart tells it like it is and I like that. emotions seen here very deep. I really love this thanks for sharing those great words
Cherokeesquaw -
This is very beautiful. I love love...I would travel around the world for it. Very Nice piece of work.
I like the pictute that goes with it it is very beautiful looks so delicate.
Good luck in the contest.
~SisterForTwo~ -
WOW!! What a fantastic poem. I love the flow of the words, they are beautifully written. Well done and best of luck with the contest
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Sister girl,
I loved this the first time I read it and I love it now; your heart just speaks volumes within every line of this piece!
Thank you for sharing, sweetie -
Rocks
This is awesome, I get the feelings you've put into this, it's just amazing!!!
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Firstly, that is quite a lovely picture that you posted for this poem. Secondly, this poem paints such a stellar and perhaps eternal picture of love. There seems to be a certain sad wistfulness implied as well, as if time is growing short. I am also reminded of instances from Greek mythology (perhaps unrelated) where two people who loved one another were placed amongst the stars when they died. Anyhow, this is a great poem and I enjoyed reading it.
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I totally liked this poem... I know how it feels to be across the world, while all your loved ones are at home... and I totally related to this poem... I like how it is self explanitory as well.
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Very provocative piece, in that knowing and accepting do not replace learning. The relationship grows and becomes stronger with the passage of time, the accrued trust and the earned devotion. This is a lovely lesson wrapped in beautiful verse. Faith in one another, hope and fulfillment are illustrated clearly with a wonderful insight and imaginative style.
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that is the great thing about online life, it gives us all the opportunity to make new friends and indeed new loves on the other side of the world
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Very lovely. The font was a bit hard to read, but the lay out is perfect and your words are expressed from such depths of your soul. Your loved one must be honored. Great job!
Cris -
creative and wonderful
This is a soulful piece. Captures such emotion and journey. Imagery great in all shapes, your words, the pattern and the pic. Well done. Thank you for sharing....wish i could write liek that. Creating a pic not only with my words but in the way they are displayed. Dawn -
Wow, I tried to do a picture poem once. It didn't work
This is a beautiful poem, and even more impressive that you created a perfect heart with it.
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Awesome!
awesome! touching and VERY cool form! my favorite lines were:
"Hearts are stitched and sewn and woven into a gentle
blanket of undeniable love and trimmed with total
unconditional trust. As two descend beneath a
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Great poem, romantic and beautiful but not too sugary. The way you shaped it like a heart and managed to fit the words into that shape is pretty amazing. I must applaud.
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Truly a beautiful poem.I loved it,every bit of it.Hope to be able to read more of your stuff.Good luck.Keep up the amazing work.
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This is like wow! how deep and romantic ur words seem to me ! i like the flow of it and there is a mixed feeling of sadness and hapiness. well thats wat love is like ! i like the rhythm and the presentation of the poem in the form of a heart! this is really romantic !
keep it up !
preets -
A wonderful poem of long distance love
Your beautiful observations will be apreciated by countless ...whether they be sharing in your very experiences or enjoying standing on the outer edges looking in Your gift of love is twinned with your writing skills May you and your beloved be happy and fulfilled .Rhygirl60 Liverpool England. -
The heart shape was an additional treat but i'm telling you even without it your poem could still have given the same impact. It was so beautiful crafted and i fell in love with the words. Great Job!!!!
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This is beautiful!!!! So incredibly sweet and romantic!!!!
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You really have a done a fabulous job on this. Not only is it beautifully conjured but it speaks volumes to the soul. Awesome piece and I'm sure Blaze loved this
Bravo! Blessings, Gypsy
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Great imagery! Fantastic layout, I was really impressed with the way this piece was designed, so intriguing and so original....Very inspiring..
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Very creative, text, color black and blue, shape and title all make perfect part of a poem and knowledge. I think this is one of those that you cherish simply because it means alot to yourself, because you understand, because you know. And thats the best part of it, when others get it too. Those be blessed who do, we need more people to express there selves in this manner out in the world. Amazingly creative and true to its words. Great creation.
Without My Heart,
Remedy -
Oh, this is so beautiful! Your words are the stiched pattern inside the design, all about endless love!
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Wow this is totally
amazing. It really
blew me away.
Great writting and
the heart shape is
incredible. I would
love to know how you
did it.
Great tribute to your
love. Beautifully
done. Thank you for
sharing. Good luck
in the contest.
Jeannie D Hunter
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WOW!
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Genius
I really enjoyed this poem. The work that went into it is clearly evident. Your imagery is stunning, as is your description of love. You have done a wonderful job of explaining the unexplainable. I thought it was very well written. Good job.
Thundercat -
Hi, what a wonderful poem, beautiful feel and flow,it took my breath away, loved it, all the best , you have my applause, great write, hugs Di
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Absolutely lovely. I enjoyed this so much from every aspect, the shape, brilliantly done! The content an imagery superb. Thanks for sharing. Kath.
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brilliant
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I love the written and actual imagery in this. Shape poems are so cleverly done and the content in this one is beautiful as well. Great piece
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From Sukrit
Tough to read but well written.This is a very good shape and tough to make,very good flow and expression,The lines:-
Half/////////////////////way
around the////////////////world you
are and still you////////are here with me.
Two souls, bound by fate, masquerade upon
the constellations that adorn the night sky. Eyes
locked in deep gaze as energies entwine becoming
mirrored reflections. Individual emotions and thought
blend together in unison forming a unique singularity.
Hearts are stitched and sewn and woven into a gentle
blanket of undeniable love and trimmed with total
unconditional trust. As two descend beneath were awesome.
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this was an intriguing write,tone to it.
The images fused with sound created a dramatic
performance of isolation and abandonment.
There are so many things we take for granted in life.
So many of life's beauties go unseen or noticed.
In the stillness of contentment we are priviledged
to peer into the corridors of another dimension.
Excellent work.
Much love again
S-Zro -
I like the imagery of lightness and brightness in this poem and I also loved these lines:
'Hearts are stitched and sewn and woven into a gentle
blanket of undeniable love' - they just stood out to me for some reason. -
wonderful.....beautifulll......
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This was an excellent piece. You'll place, no doubt. You SHOULD place, leastways. But anyway, I loved the heart formation of your words, and the picture added nicely to the mood of the poem. A marvelous work of words, you've got here. Best of luck in the contest!
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This is very well written and presented. It was a joy to read and fun to find. Thank you and all the best.
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Beautiful! you have such a wonderful way with words, and I am so impressed to see your poetry literally take shape! Excellent write, good luck hon.
~Carrie
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Wow! This is a great write that you have penned and you did it in such a unique style. I really enjoyed this, thanks for sharing and good luck to you in the contest.
*Ktulu Blackwolfe* -
This is wonderful, it soothes my tumultuous heart every time I read it. Thankyou for sharing it, you have a true gift. Never stop penning. Mistress Magic x
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this gorgeous celtic... you've done a lovely job with this write... peace to you... and harmony...shzoosy
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i read this and commented on it once before, but came back to read it again. because that is how beautiful i think it is. for some unknown reason this poem has really touched my heart. and i love the words. i love the feeling of being in love, and this poem somehow makes me love, my love even more. this is an outstanding write. this is one poem that i shall always save. thank you. joyce
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WOW! Just..........WOW!!! this is awesome! Every part! The poem is just.......amazing, the pcture, the shape of the words!!!!! awesome!
Forever Yours,
Caroline -
This is incredible! The poem, the shape, the graphic! I'd say someone is in love!
You did a superb job with this. I'd say you have an excellent chance in the contest! Wowzers! Blazing must be awe-struck!
SG -
Quite softly spoken, soothing & caressing the ear of whom it is dedicated too. Loved the shape and the message. Just Gorgeous!
Pen on poetess
Love & Light~
~Joy -
EXCELLENT!!!
VERY BEAUTIFUL, I LOVE THE FLOW OF YOUR WORDS, AND THE WAY YOU FORMED THE WORDS IN A HEART, JUST AWESOME!!! KEEP IT UP, YOUR A GREAT POET!!! -
Amazing how you penetrate with your words from one heart to the next, I know this captivated my thoughts as I read you here my dear friend, you are very special, and I love the way you move me through your poetry, as I know you do many..Lots of love, Timothy
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OMG this is just so very beautiful. amazingly written. an excellent job. you should be proud. this is one very outstanding poem. very touching. i just love it. this is like a never ending love. one that can do more then stand the test of time. wonerful, just wonderful.
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Half/////////////////////way
around the////////////////world you
are and still you////////are here with me.
Two souls, bound by fate, masquerade upon
the constellations that adorn the night sky. Eyes
locked in deep gaze as energies entwine becoming
mirrored reflections. Individual emotions and thought
blend together in unison forming a unique singularity.
Hearts are stitched and sewn and woven into a gentle
blanket of undeniable love and trimmed with total
unconditional trust. As two descend beneath a
lacy veil of knowledge a new path is drawn.
Now taking to flight upon an unknown
journey they emerge within the
silken wraps of wisdom as
one. Enveloped within
one another they
soar through
space and
time.
This is just a wonderful piece of work. I like the picture the background and the words, how beautiful is this piece of work -
Thank You
This was such a beautiful piece i just could not stop reading. You could not have matched a better photo to go with it as well thank you for such a wonderful write and keep penning..................Michael -
You have delivered a poem in concrete fashion that gives the reflection of love an almost literal reality. That the emotions generated between a man and women could stay as you have written indefinetly would indeed be a tribute. I am not sure that one could anything else done though. It was moving and as I said the concrete portion sealed its power. RC
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WHOA. THIS IS AMAZING. I AM... SHOCKED. This is beautifully put! Hope you win the contest because this just blows me away! Sweet... and the way you presented it, the heart-shape, is very intriguing and attract to the poem! The picture is very beautiful, too! Thanks for sharing!
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Wow, I am soooo impressed with these words of love and dedication. They are beautifully written and so full of emotions of the real kind. I am impressed with this heart shape full of lovely words.
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marvelous, outstanding etc, etc.
WOW!!!
AMMMMAZING!
this is such a great poem, i love the fact that it is shaped into a heart, i love the vocabulary as well.
Hearts are stitched and sewn and woven into a gentle
blanket of undeniable love and trimmed with total
unconditional trust
this my absolute favorite line.
your words go together so nicely.
this poem is worthy of an applause, i wish you luck in the contest, this is a beautiful poem. -
My goodness, wow. That sounds so perfect, it one of those poems that describes something so perfectly, it's scary. The picture goes along great with this too, and I love how you wrote in a form of a heart, thats simply brillaint how you can make it sound so good and make it look good too..
WOW.. -
Awwwwwwwwe! This is so beautiful! It reads so smoothly, and is so sweet. And the presentation is awesome. I always try to do crafy little shapes and stuff. But I am not good at it and always end up leaving things out. Once I did a poem about Lothlorian elves though and it was in the shape of their leaf. But that was about as good as I could do, but I'm rambling.. I'm half asleep. xD!
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Totally Righteous
Sweet sister mine, this is just...wow! Awesome! Your fine talent shines forth and you couldn't of picked a more deserving guy to honor!
The best of the best to you, hon; this is wow beautiful! -
Wow, Auntie! Between you three I am not going to know what to do with myself! I think that this dedication to Uncle Blaze is beautiful and very moving. Thank you for sharing it with us. You are a sweet woman and I am happy that you have found happiness!
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Thanks Lavender....it was a pleasure hun. Ya Dad is great and such a sweetie. I just love him to death. I think I'll keep him
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This is absolutely phenominal! Making a heart-shaped poem isn't the easiest of tasks (I've tried it myself, and it didn't look close to this noce!)... but then your words are so eloquent, graceful, and so heartfelt. What a gorgeous metaphor you've sewn into here. Truly amazing! Thank you so much for entering my contest, and for honouring Blaze with this.
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awwwwwwwwwwwwww this is soooo beautiful and touches me deeply Bel from the beautiful structure to the loving words you honor me and make me blush a bit
thank my sweet lioness
love ya,
Blaze
Edited on May 27, 8:58 p.m. because ''.
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