you played with me,
and broke my heart...
laughing as I cried!
I wanted you,
but you didn't know...
I fell in love with your eyes.
your heart it screamed,
and mine just broke...
do you even care?
I want you to know,
so I'll say it slow...
Ich....
Liebe...
Dich!
Author notes
the German part means **I love you**
Written May 27th, 2006
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thank you SO much for reading! and ya know. i didn't even know I did that...I wrotte it on another site at first, so I was writing fast...yeah, I'll go change it! thanks again!!!
~Casey~ -
I loved this really much... I am German so I had to read this
But... I would have liked it even more if you had not used 'u' and 'ur' instead of the proper words 'you' and 'your'.
Nevertheless, it was great... (But maybe you should consider changing it?)
Weiter so! (= Keep it up!)
LittleAnn
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this was wonderful Casey
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awwwwwww thank you sweetie!!! adn no, i am not German..that's cool..that you are!! my friends has been teaching me a little. thanks again!
~Casey~
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what a pretty peice of art i love it i love the end when it is in german for "i love you". are you german? i am . someone in my family is from germany.i don't know though . but i am tall like my daddy i love your poem its wonderful just keep up the wonderful work you do good job. write on .
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thanks ever so much, that's the second person that wrote somethingso beautiful in a comment to my peom.....that makes me feel great!!! "A broken heart speaks volumes in poetry." thanks again!
~Casey~ -
Unique
Very unique. I like this poem. And I adore the ending, the format and the explanation of the German in your comments. Thankfully, for I would have never known the last words!! Your poem holds such a feeling of: longing? A broken heart speaks volumes in poetry. Blessings! Tammy -
wow, thank you! i mean thanks...i won't it in like 2 sec...but everyone says it's like wonderful and amanzing! i guess it came form the heart...i mean it's one of the only TRUE poems about me...i liked this guy like all year(and his German so i wrote 'I love you' in HIS lang.)but now i don't really like him that much anymore but like i wish he would have known...i guesss, thanks again!!!
~Casey~ -
Shergut!
The title grabbed my attention since I took german classes. Your was beautifully penned . The emotions were depicted in a very craftey manner. What was driving inspiration behind your masterful piece of poetry?
-Keep the ink flowing!
-Dave -
You know. I really liked this poem, except that I wish you would have spelled "you" and "your" as opposed to using the IM terminology for it. It really brings the intelligence of the poem down by about 3 grade levels. The fact that you know German is great--but poetry is about words... and knowing how to spell them, too.
Anyway, not to preach, I did love the poem, and keep writing, I just figured I would point that one little thing out... (I'm majoring in English in college, so I can sometimes be a bit of a grammar nazi, I guess...)
May your pen never cease to flow!
~Fury -
Perfection
I Love This Poem especialy the ending, the German words for I Love You. What a brilliant idea. I hope whomevers heart got broken has healed again, The eyes are the windows to the Soul. -
"I love you! is beautiful in any langauge" wow that's deep(i think) i like it alot! thanks so much for reading!!!
~Casey~ -
thanks for clearing things up for me !lol a couple of other people had told me that but no one took the time to explain it to me! thanks again! and i changed oit! lol
~Casey~ -
awwwwwwww thank you so much! it means alot to me when i get a comment like that!!! thanks again for reading and stuff!!!
~Casey~ -
thanks! lol, yeah i thought so to, but ooh well! i can fix that!lol thanks again!
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beautifully written
What a beautiful piece of art, and it's short ad sweet. I know you must mean the three last words. I love you! is beautiful in any langauge,..write ON!...ennovy
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I had to click on this because I speak German! This poem was very moving, I like the way you packed so much emotion into a short poem. Just one thing - the German at the end should say 'ich liebe dich' - 'ich liebe du' is gramatically wrong - it's because 'du' and 'dich' both mean 'you', but you have to use different ones at different times ('dich' is the accusative of 'du' if that rings any bells!). It would sound as odd as someone saying 'I love he' instead of 'I love him'.
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With my very limited knowledge of German I believe it should be Ich liebe Dich, but either way, it means the same. A very touching tribute to someone. Well done.
Rory -
This is really sad and heartfelt but also really beautiful in many ways...I love the German at the end, although I can't speak it at all !! lol
Well written and indeed a pleasure to read xxx -
he... i speak minimal german.. and i thought it was right actually.. but i dropped it last year.
i really liked this poem..
jess -
awww thanks sweetie!!
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ok...i think i might change ity cuz ur the 2 person to say something....but i got it from a friend who speaks fluent German...and she said that u can say Du or Dich....it means the same thing...but thanks for reading!!
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that was wonderful!
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You're spreading bad German (lol). You already have someone repeating the incorrect word "Du." "Du" is nominative case. It must be "Dich" in the accusative case — the direct object. It should be "Ich liebe Dich." Check out i-tunes or some other source for songs with just that title.
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thank you...could u please tell people about this poem...please and thank you...if ya want to kno y then just read the reply to the firt comment on this poem! thanks ever so much! keep in touch!!!
~Casey~
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aw thank you Brian!!!it means **I love you** thank u for reading it though!!! Ich Liebe Du!
~Casey~ -
yep! u got it...it is **I love you** thanks for reading and commenting and stuff! it makes me feel better when people readmy feelings and 'comment' them! pass my poem on please!(tell people about it...i won't alot of people to read it) thanks!
~Casey~ -
im sorry. this is really sad
ive been here before too. im kinda still here. great poem, babe. te German confuses me lol good job
... miss you tons. talk soon
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Though I don't speak a word of German I'm sure this poem is not a happy one. I'm sorry this happened to you.
Expressive. Well done.
Brian -
My German is very bad... is that I love you?
I'm so sorry, this is a terrib;e way to feel. </3 You put it into words very well, though. I can see the emotion behind it... Again, I'm sorry you felt this way. Lovely poem.
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