Trampled on by social grace,
Kindness lost in empty space,
Grapple love in hate's embrace,
Leathered heart, weathered lace.
How to help or how to grow,
Vocabulary not in tow.
Stand upon the pomp and show
In choruses of, "what to know."
Gathered briefly, harm undone,
Settled into setting sun.
Stings he still from social fun.
Gasps he for a breath to run.
Wild and free, he takes the road,
Not beholding to the load
Of social stigma, bound and bowed,
To fly beyond the label toad.
Sweet songs swept in soft surround.
Heart of beating is the sound.
By day, by brow, in books unbound.
By those who broke the rules he found.
Now content inside this skin,
He fits a fragrant phrase, and then,
He sits upon the out and in
To rest no limits on his pen.
Author notes
Poetic Justice 
Written May 27th, 2006
In a list
A contest entry
- Winklings Contest # 25 by Andantino.
440 points, ended June 26, 2006, 13 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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i have not come across anyone else as yet who writes like this, it was a superb read its flow was so smooth it was a proffesional write that left a taste on my tounge, after another read it leaves you thinking, it has some great use of vocab in there a really good write
well done
white
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Ron (Lyndon) asked me to help with the judging. I agree with his assessment above and I too find it a very creative interpretation of the chosen competition line. This poem is well organized and gives the reader a lot of food for thought. Thanks for entering a well-written poem!
~ Nicolette
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You managed monorhyme quatrains quite well. I found on reading and re-reading that the effect you wanted concerning Poetic Justice was not as apparent as you may have supposed. There is no doubting each phrase points towards it but not in an organic , unified way, to my way of thinking. Thank you for provoking interest in a well framed, form poem.
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I like the rhyme scheme, it helps to tell the story. Good luck on future writtings
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WONDERFUL POEM
This was a wonderful poem. Your flow and rhyme amazing. It was a pleasure to read this morning. Best of luck in the contest. Take care, Sandy
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I really liked how you used the monorhyme form with your quatrains. It’s not always an easy thing, because they often become mundane and boring. But yours did no such thing. You have a strong message going on, and I truly loved it.
~ John
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I like the form you used here and the line
Leathered heart, weathered lace.
is filled with such a keen image. Very enjoyable read
best wishes
Peace Muddy
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I enjoyed this read.
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this is very clever such a good rhyming pattern telling the tale, something in here we can all learn from where we spend too much of our lives fitting in to social expectations and suppressing the real us, we dont need all these social trappings and come the day when I no longer have to work I will be more than happy to rid myself of these things and enjoy life, maybe even pen a few poems who knows, Broad
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