I’ve made myself beautiful
to guarantee love
and all I’ve discovered
is beauty attracts dirt.
No-good men.
Surrounded by them.
In the end
I am alone.
I have needs.
Why, when I say ‘yes’,
do I wake up
with no-good men?
This is a bottle of ‘no’
to build up resistance
to no-good men, and my nature,
a nature programmed to says ‘yes’
to no-good men.
I could put on sixty pounds
to keep the dirt away
and numb the pain.
This bottle of ‘no’?
It promised to numb the pain.
It lied.
Under the label
is a bottle of ‘I don’t care’
that revealed itself
after my last failed 'no'.
I’ve searched for answers.
All I’ve found
is a bottle of ‘no’.
Now all I’m addicted to is'I don’t care'.
Was I meant for this world
I’m living in?
I’m soft, and I’m screwed.
If I’m hard, I lose.
“You know you want it.”
the dirtbags say.
Come on, bottle of ‘no’,
you have an answer to that.
What is it?
I put my ear close,
and i hear...
Tell him,
“Yes, I want it,
and really bad,
but I’m waiting
for the right man,
dirtbag.”
I’m thinking,
“This couldn’t be a bottle of ‘no’,
it makes too much sense...
and what do you know,
someone whispered it in my ear...
I think I've found the right man.
No more bottle of 'no'...
Author notes
This is my piece written to that much-used picture...
Inspired by everything blushfulmoon could not say in allpoetry.com/Poem/2034826
Written May 27th, 2006
painting by Lorenzo Sperlonga
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1500 points, ended July 15, 2007, 19 entries
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I like this, it’s a different approach and very original. I smiled wondering if the 60 pounds would affect angel flight. Best of luck in the contest and thank you for entering.
Love,
Amera ♥
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i can totally relate to this the bottle of no that makes you feel that everything is ok until the morning after, its the false confidence and the going along with things until the harsh light of day! this is a wonderful write bro well done pic goes very well with it
xx c
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Well, wbiro, I'm going to jump out on a limb here and decide that although I've been to this site twice, this is the only comment I've left. If I'm wrong, then please forgive any descrepancies in the two...LOL. I've been thinking about your poem, and I really like the social message here. It looks like you meant this to be half-comical, but in this case, it's like a spoonful of sugar makes the medicine better. After re-reading your categories, I have to say that it must be smart-assed, tongue in cheek humor, if any at all. The message here is very important for women, especially young ones and teenagers. In this country, the national average age for sexually active girls has dropped dramatically in the last 20 years, and many many of them are in abusive relationships. I think that it's partly because there is no bottle of NO. It truly is a bottle of I DON'T CARE, and sadly, the young people are hooked on the bottle no matter which. I'm really glad you ended your poem this way. It is a hopeful message to women who need it and to women who already know how many others need it. Thanks - Toni
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Oh my..or a bottle of no indeed! This is another very creative write, and with a happy ending..now that's different! lol!
I love your mind..it sweeps me away everytime, from the first sip to the bottom of the bottle! Well done!
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lol! You have a brilliant mind! (not déja-vu, is this?
) This is fantastic, it really is! 
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This is a very good poem ap daddy!!! You did a great job!!! Sorry I haven't beeen on here in forever!!!
Hugs,
Beth -
This is a very orignal poem. I love the idea and the picture is awesome. The flow is wonderful. 'Tell him, “Yes, I want it,and really bad, but I’m waiting, for the right man,dirtbag.” ' has to be my favorite part. Thanks for sharing the poem and keep writing.
Cassie -
this was an intriguing piece...a jose loosens my morals...hehehehe... liked the flow to this one...peace and harmony...shzoosy
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A very sad poem with a happyish ending.
Very true to.
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I think this has been said, but i agree, wonderful concept. so original and yet easy to grasp also very personal, but many can relate to it. I found the negative and positive in this writing, the negative being in the low self-esteem, and making yourself somthing to be accepted. Yet a huge positive in the strength of knowing better and gaining self-respect out of the little that there appeared to be in the begining. I felt as if a realisation was taking place throughout this. I loved it.
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I think your intrepretation of her eyes are dead accurate. Be interesting to know the background to the art - too acurate not to be taken from a photo, I'd guess. But the look is fascinating. Whew!
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I like how the poetry just flows right along with the picture a piece of art with words of art. Great write.
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thanks kv for the encouragement!
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thanks, gradstudent, cliche pic- maybe, but it's a part of the story behind the poem... and to be honest, I kept looking into her eyes for the next stanza!
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thanks, honey bear, glad you related!
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very good
oh i like this ,that constant struggle not to give it up to those that dont deserve it ,some dont even deserve to look never mind touch but the wait is worthwhile when that special one comes along to change the no to a "yes please" thank you for sharing this with us and keep up the good work
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Interesting poem. Not exactly a feminist perspective of life, but it sounds like you're trying to figure things out. The flow and rhythm moved the poem along and built the story. The picture seemed too cliche to put at the top of such a multi-layered story.
Just a thought.
Anne -
Very interesting! I like the concept of the "bottle of 'no'," and, found it was easy to follow which can be hard to achieve when one writes a poem/story, which is what this seemed to be, like a slice of life . . . Always the wrong men, but she's wanting the right person, her soulmate, her person, to come along. Sadly the addiction to alcohol changes a person, including their perspective and in a myriad of other ways. And, from what I got, her self-esteem is almost non-existent and she even gets to a point where she doesn't care anymore, believing she'll be alone all her life except for that bottle of "No." When Mr. Right came along, he showed care, concern, even love, by handing her another type of drink, nothing harmful, and she sipped of that and, basically, discovered her Prince Charming. I found this interesting. I'm sure it was difficult, but you got it together. Keep writing and reading. You are well on your way! Thank you for sharing!--Kel
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That was a nice one. Very thoughtful. Great poem. You get my first applause today
Sineana
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Hey Wbiro, another great one! I haven't read too many of yours but I see that you're really talented...Keep up the great works!
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Very interesting! What a great interpretation! I think that every woman goes through something like this in their life, don't you? Wonderful flow also!
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Great interpetation of the picture. Loved the feel and flow and the thoughts were provoking. Great piece from start to finish! Keep your pen forever flowing Bunny
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Thanks, Sara... (that IS you under that hat, isn't it?) lol I think I'll try to clear the end up, anyway!
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thanks... indulge... interesting take... to be honest in the end I had in mind a protein drink or something healthy! lol (something that offers more 'sense'!) and the guy who gave it to her would have been Mr. Right...
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i found it to be a 'little' bit confusing, but i pretty much got it
i like it! its written really well, and she's smoking marlboros! thats bad for your health lol, great job!
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A very powerful message conveyed through a simple set-up. I really like this. I don't see how the ending was confusing-- from what I gathered, the inebriation brought on by the switching of drinks created the last line. The title being repeated throughout also strengthens the piece-- it has a very distinct image. Nice job!
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confusing... hmmm... maybe that's a good thing here!
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GREAT
wow, thats great. confusing but wonderful. Did u really find the right man? if so congratulations!
Keep writin
Amz
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