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Photo Album (Double Triolet)


 

The photo album of shadowed sorrows
brought out only in times of need
To warn myself of broken tomorrows;
The photo album of shadowed sorrows

Time is something that often borrows
too much to repay, showing its greed
The photo album of shadowed sorrows
brought out only in times of need

A welcomed guest, is this pain I feel
because it reminds me I’m still alive
Thank God for this suffering ordeal;
A welcomed guest, is this pain I feel

Sometimes lost within love’s appeal
I wonder if my heart will survive
A welcomed guest, is this pain I feel
because it reminds me I’m still alive


Author notes

Option #1 - Photo Album

This is a Triolet - Rhyme Scheme of ABaA abAB
Written May 26th, 2006

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  • swimma
    June 10, 2006
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    i cant believe someone can write something so perfect its amazing........it gives me hope as a writer but also makes me feel i will never be great....i could never write to this level, the level that makes people imagine they are ther, the empathy....im overjoyed you have this power in your writing...thankyou for giving me the plesure in reading it...how can i fault something i am unable to do?


  • J Rhys Davies
    June 8, 2006
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    Well, I can understand what you are saying, because I believe you have never seen the Triolet Form of poetry, right? It has a specific rhyme scheme as well as a set format to follow in the lines themselves:

    A Triolet is a poetic form consisting of only 8 lines. Within a Triolet, the 1st, 4th, and 7th lines repeat, and the 2nd and 8th lines do as well. The rhyme scheme is simple: ABaA abAB, capital letters representing the repeated lines.

    Hopefully now you understand the reason for the repeating of those specific words?


  • Gang of Harlequins
    June 7, 2006
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    well what i was saying was that i thought you could use more words. you always used "sorrows,feel" it was a good poem dont get me wronge and i understand that it had to rhyme for the contest but i would like to see a poem of yours that did not rhyme. i will most likely check your other poems that dont rhyme to see what there like.


  • J Rhys Davies
    June 4, 2006
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    Hey Porcelain Sky. I am curious to see what part of the rhyming you didn’t care for. Maybe a suggestion in improving it could help me out, rather than just saying you didn’t like it?


  • Gang of Harlequins
    June 3, 2006
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    ok well i did not really like the rhyming but you did a good job on the poem .....keep up the good work

  • Friends
    May 30, 2006
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    Excellent exaple in poetry forms. How you inspire me and others in your forms of poetry. What a delight to follow your poems where ever you display them. I enjoy your writes.

  • g--------------
    May 29, 2006
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    Brillant John, I find photos remind us who we were and who we've become. I have some I took when I was a child sitting on my great-granparents barn. It reminds me of my spirit every time life brings me down. And yes some photos remind you of your own humantiy and pain. Nice work here.


  • galfalfa gold member
    May 28, 2006
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    What a very almost musical kind of read..i love this style John. Perfectly penned - Photo albums - a peek into the past can bring pain as well as a reminder of happier times when life just seemed so simple and uncomplicated. It's yearned for at times... Loved this - brilliantly done!


  • Recluse Writer gold member
    May 28, 2006
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    I knew I would get back to you somehow, if only at this point to say congratulations on the trophy from Penz. Also to thank you for your columns which helped immensely in this our first
    contest. Judging is soooo hard.
    The opportunity to read and comment on so many within one contest was a great experience for me. Again I thank you.
    Linda


  • wings of an angel
    May 27, 2006
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    Very nice poem John well done my friend good luck in the contest


  • Ariosto II. gold member
    May 27, 2006
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    they say in music a knowledge of piano helps in all things, in art I know a skill in representational drawing helps in all things. In poetry I'm sure it's a knowledge of traditional form and rhyme.
    Your work exudes this knowledge.
    Wonderful! Childes and Preston eat your hearts out.
    D


  • BonBon
    May 27, 2006
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    I will share from my Book of Loving Memories.
    A little sunshine to brighten those dark clouds of sadness.
    Perfume from my Magnolia and the Irish beauty of a rose.
    A childs laughter ringing true to thy ears.
    A greeting from a puppy's wagging tail.
    The touch of a gentle rain upon thy furrowed brow.
    These things I share for your Photo Album.

    Good Jobber. Good luck.
    Hugs BonBon


  • rufina caraid gold member
    May 27, 2006
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    john I have to say that the image set the scene for your poem and what a wonderful experience it was too. I like the format used as each sentence blends intot the stanza whoich evetually combines with both previous and next for a polished finish.

    Von


  • Legend silver member
    May 27, 2006
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    excellent

    John Excellent, there is little more to say,It is true a picture paints a thousand words.What memories an old photo album provides .There will be no better words than these you have penned to describe that feeling Well done and good luck in this contest


  • pattyann4500
    May 26, 2006
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    I didn't get custody of any of my photo albums; most were turned to ashes after pictures were torn and destroyed. I have a few pictures that were given to me "out of the goodness of his heart." Those I don't look at; they're much too painful for me. I have no pictures of my own children on my desk or in my bedroom for my heart would break at the sight of them.

    I love your poem, John, but sometimes I'd rather the pain didn't remind me that I'm still alive. Hugs, Patricia ♥


  • Penz gold member
    May 26, 2006
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    Hihi I'm not also familiar with triolet, but hey, this poem sounds cool. Maybe I should try writing triolets too Great write, I love the rhyming.

    I love the last two lines, it's a great way on ending this poem... You did a great job in relating the title to your poem. You achieved a great poem we could all reflect upon.

    Photo Albums remind us of who we are before what we are now
    ~penz~

    Good luck and thanks for entering my contest!


  • Recluse Writer gold member
    May 26, 2006
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    On behalf of Penz I thank you for entering this wonderful poem
    in his contest.
    I am not too familiar with triolet rhyme scheme but I see how you have achieved it. Yes I agree photo albums help us to see
    they are just pictures of past memories that remind us we are alive.
    Good luck in the contest.
    Recluse Writer

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