Ed denigrated
Jane Pauley's tits
which annoyed some people
as the general opinion
held that while small
they were well shaped;
it was the question about metaphor
which set him off
after all.
the lights in the city are loud
so Ed sits in the shadows
by the dumpster
hoping someone
will drop off a Barbie doll,
"Pure Plastic Art",
Ed says
fondling the dark green bottle
he received from Rose
at the Blue Bonnet Bowl
when the country band got smashed
and Anna offered to take him home
but he collapsed
the milk white foam
of remembrance
frothing from his nose
and everyone cheered
at the bursting bubbles
through the hazy glow of beer
drifting out from the bathroom.
that's how he wound up here
waiting on Barbie.
A penchant for tears
of course,
maudlin sentiment
though the whisky spoils his notes
and causes him to curse
in the middle of his mystery
where the woman in red begs.
He always colors her with big tits;
"Ed is a bit obsessed",
Jane says
ordering a bigger mirror for her new dressing
room,
one she hopes might magnify
things a bit.
Author notes
Art stuff. sorta.
Written May 26th, 2006
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Art stuff sorta, eh?
Sometimes I wonder what goes through newborn babies' heads once they can focus on the world, before they have the labels to sort things into categories of meaning. Well, we were all in that state at one time, but, without the labels, have no means to recall the memory. Shame, that, but I think maybe one role of art - some art, anyhow - could be to get us back to that state of sensing without knowing.
That's my approach to poems whose meanings are not immediately apparent to me: I just relax and enjoy the ride into a realm I would not otherwise be able to access. You provide many such rides, thanks to vivid imagery and play with words. Thank you for that.
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Personally I never really ever played with dolls. I certainly dislike barbies. Maybe because I just couldn't identify with the role play. Humour conceals much depth.
Maria -
There's nothing like this! It's so unique, so weird, so amusing. I think you just broke out into something new to you. And did a fine job. Hope that Barbie shows up soon.
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If janes, or anyones tits are small, it is imperative they be well shaped. That's what UB told me anyway and she knows all about that kinda stuff. I never had a penchant for womens tits, large or small. (I love the word penchant and will try to use it more often now) penchant, penchant.
Anyways thanks for the grins. You should post this over at substanza too but do it in French.
Desiree Darkk
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Nice imagery of a night out with a bit too much booze and a strange way of looking at a ladies body. I thought it was kind of funny though. Although... Lute .... big tits are not more beautiful than small ones. You have to see tits in combination with a person's body. Fat ladies with small tits are not beautiful, but slim girls with footballs aren't either. So, have another look when you are sober. lol.
Q.
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This is clever and I'm so grateful for being remindedc of Jane pauley's tits. I hadn't thought of them in years but yes, understated and perfect as was the rest of her. Great visulaizations here besides those perky, rosebud tipped (alas) by now antiques.
Ed by the dumpster waiting for barbie...love it.
Different from the others of yours I've read Lute. But this just makes you better in my eyes. I have a taste for grunge.
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this was different...and different is a good thing .... i liked the story it told...peace and harmony... shzoosy
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a reality check for ed and jane I think but then needing big tits and a hazy beer glow is reality.... mmmmmmm fascinating
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Whoa. It's always a pleasure to read something truly original on this site. So unusual and wonderfully strange, very well imagined. Your language is plain yet the poem still manages to twist and contort meaning - still not sure exactly what you are alluring to, but I'd read this more as a set piece, a story, rather than a poem written to be deep and, I don't know, wise and moral, I suppose. I like it a lot.
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The poem just keeps unravelling into something new. I liked the cyclical nature of it. It has a good flow, but maybe you could do something to make the links between moods a bit more clear? Anyways, it is a very enjoyable poem which stretches the imagination.
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Odd but intriguing, imagination's in good working order I see! Great write
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very good
a very stange but interesting write Mmm maybe i shoul dget m ea new mirror to try and magnify things ..i wonder if it would work? a fascinating work my friend thank you for sharing this with us and keep up the good work
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Very interesting read.
I thought it was going
to be a news thing too!
Great job.
Thank you for sharing.
Jeannie D
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Poor Jane trying to live up to Ed's standards. Weird.
A very interesting read
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I like all kinds really. Small ones too. Tits that is. I prefer cocks to be monstrous. I retched. Hehehehhe.
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OH.
This is so good.
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well this is interesting. At first I thought it was gonna be an attack against the news system or something, but it turned out to be completely different (which is probably a good thing). I like it. The character of Ed is an interesting character. The obsession with Art (and other things) plays into the role nicely.
cool piece!
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