Once upon a day gone bye
There was a man who wished to fly
He kept a twinkle in his eye
To compliment a heart of gold
His hands were strong and calloused rough
From labors hard when times were tough...
It never seemed to be enough
To make his wishful wings unfold
Though disappointments held him down
He wouldn't once present a frown
He'd play the part and act the clown
So proud, this one who dared to dream
Of soaring over mountains heights
Above the clouds and northern lights
To see the rich and heavenly sights
That make the soul and spirit gleam
But time is doomed to never last
His future slipped into the past
It seemed to all go by so fast
A life held captive to the ground
And at his end of earthly days
He took his leave of mortal ways
Now on the winds his spirit plays
A melody of sweetest sound
He drifted off on wishful wings
There's no more need for dreaming things
He knows the joy that soaring brings
Above this rolling sea of men
He tipped his hat and waved goodbye
As starlight twinkled in his eye
This man who wished that he could fly
Will never have to land again
Author notes
Written May 26th, 2006
A contest entry
- A Good Old Poem, from younger years by Violinstrings.
650 points, ended November 15, 2008, 32 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Fabulous
This is so beautiful, it really captured me
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This poem creates such a good, wonderful story. You did a wonderful job explaining everything. I like the rhyming, but also how not every line rhymes. Wonderful job!
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good story
about a man leaving
fairytale ish
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very good story
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Good stuff
You must have been having a good day on this one.I liked it -
Awesomeness!...man, i just love the way your poems mangae to rhyme without ever feeling forced...great job!!
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Beautiful work my friend. It is great to see you posting here again. I have missed your poetry....and you.
~Lyrical
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Awesome piece of poetry! You managed to told a nice story inside a poem, by keeping a good flow of the words and not being boring. It reminds of the myth of "Icarus" as well. Congratulations!
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absolutely magic! beautifully written. thank you for sharing. best of wishes to you. good luck in all you do. peace always in all ways!
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Superb!!!
Ooooh I really loved this poem, it has such nice rythme, almost like a song. I also admire your usage of words. A really enjoyable read!! Thx so much for sharing this with us!! -
so heartwarming. it made me smile- great work!! Mistress Magic x
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Brava, Brava! This was cool, and the way it flowed was so smooth,it was great! I loved it. More more! Brava! Keep it up, here is 7 points to keep you ticking!
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super nice read well done keep it up
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