i imagine of a day so perfect,
in which i dont find a single defect..
a lovely weather with the sky crying with so much happiness,
that i want to get all wet and about the world i dont caress..
a day so perfect with you and me,
when away from this world we do flee...
caring about nothing except both of us,
with no distrust and no grudge...
hugging each other and feeling by the side,
with a feeling so different inside...
that's not all i ask from a perfect day,
but more..more yeah i do want to say..
a day with with so much understanding parents,
with no restrictions and no barents...
where i dont need to hide a thing,
nothing would be considered a sin..
i think of a day so bright,
when you would from front of me never be out of my sight...
sitting there grinning in that flirty way,
oh that would be so wonderful to start my day ...
i think of a day so full of all my desire,
of all things all people i try to aspire...
a day when i myself feel so fit ,
with all my guts or even if i have to stand or sit...
comfortable in there in those arms so full of love,
i would be truly in air like that flying dove ...
with all my friends there waiting for me to return ,
and do some mischeif and have some fun..
this day is far too virtual but it would surely come,
as life is too long for not a day so perfect whole as a sum...
Shreya~agarwal
Author notes
hmm not actually what i imagined ..but ya i did make it a bit romantic so that not to lose substance ..A day i would imagine would not include all that except the awsome weather,all my friends,no scolding parents ,and ofcourse me .....................................
S h R e Y a
Written May 26th, 2006
A contest entry
- The Ode Contest(PLEASE Click Wisely) by Raazi.
400 points, ended May 28, 2006, 8 entries
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thanx a bundle The Risen Sun....I did not win....It's k it's just the beginning and yeah i would surely do the changes...
S h R e Y a -
Can you please name the poem- An Ode To Imagination.
Firstly, the title is too long. The title should be short and to the point.
Also, the use of chat language harms the poem.
Thirdly, try using proper capitalization technique.
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Sometimes I would like to flee from this world lol, and I agree a world where nothing was a sin would be great...but then that world seem so far in the distance~ I found this to be a little choppy while trying to read of course it might have been the way I was reading it...I have come to realize that something can sound perfect to the person who made it but others may read it differently and it sounds rough...my mom reads my poems different then I do when writing them so nowadays I read them to her
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amazing
This paints a really beautiful picture of never ending love. Lemme tell it to you this way: no matter how pure, love can let you down! I do adore your poem, it's a wonderful dream! I wish that all girls find and accomplish this dream...
Great poem, and good luck in the contest! -
wonderful ,that's all it is....
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