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The Pussy Cat

I just met the strangest pussy cat
He was purple, orange and blue
Now that sounds silly doesn't it?
Well I'll leave that up to you

See Mr. pussy cat strolled on up to me
And politely asked for a treat
Now I'm thinking for sure I've lost my mind
Because pussy cats can't speak!

But before I knew it I reached into my bag
And pulled out a banana flavored FISH?!
I swear the pussy cat smiled at me!
And said, "This is my favorite dish!!"

I nearly wanted to ask him his name
Maybe I should get some water to drink
This hot weather has got to be getting to me
Now really, I must stop and think

Well I thought I pulled myself together
Because I looked all around for that cat
But I didn't see him anywhere
Now what should I make of that?

I did find a little note from him
And for the treat, he kindly said "thank you"
Now wait one minute, pussy cats can't write!
Nor can they be purple, orange and blue!?

And who ever heard of banana fish?
Or that it's a pussy cat's favorite treat?
I think it must simply be magical
Because this pussy cat, I DID meet

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Michele Newcomer
Written May 26th, 2006

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Comments

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  • Himitsu
    May 30
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    Quite the fanciful yarn. I enjoyed this peculiar piece. Thank you for your entry.


  • Pisces Pieces
    October 20, 2006
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    Thank you so much for reading and for your sweet comment I'm working on an entry for your contest too! I hope it will turn out well...sometimes I have to let it sit for awhile until more comes to me...
    Thanks again!

    ♥


  • Grey Mouser
    October 19, 2006
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    Michele, this is a wonderful poem you have here. It is so fanciful and free that I was caught up in it and rapt waiting for each new line. If I loved it this much how can the kids not as well. For aren't we all just big kids at heart. So very well done and best wishes to you. Be blessed, and would really like to see you place an entry into my contest.

    Mouser

  • Pisces Pieces
    October 19, 2006
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    Thank you so much, I work in a hospital that specializes in children with disabilities. I am on the rehab/neuro unit and so there are alot of children with brain and spinal cord injuries, I know what you mean when you say it is hard, but it is also very very inspiring and rewarding, that's why we are still here...

    I have another poem that I wasn't sure if would fit your project, it's about the children but from our perspective, if you'd like to check it before I enter it, and let me know if you think it would be a good addition to your project, please let me know...it's a beautiful thing that you are doing!!

    Here's the link:

    allpoetry.com/Poem/2225531

    Thanks again


  • StormGoddess Greeters member
    October 19, 2006
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    This is so cute and funny too, just the thing to relieve the blues.
    I am sure your poem will make them smile, even if just for a short while.

    Thank you so much for entering my project.
    Storm


  • CarolDesjarlais silver member
    October 19, 2006
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    what a cute poem.....children and adults alike need to remember the child within.


  • scorpio rising
    October 16, 2006
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    Hahahahaha...

    How cute!!!!!!!!

    And....


    Howcome you never showed me this before?

    Do you remember when we first started talking?

    It wierd eh

    How different we have become


    Beautiful write Miss

    I like it a lot


    Keep them comin!

    Much Love


  • Cupcrazy gold member
    June 12, 2006
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    In the final round you received 51 kisses to give you a total or 101 Bunny


  • Cupcrazy gold member
    June 12, 2006
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    You recieved 50 kisses from the children! Bunny

  • Cupcrazy gold member
    June 8, 2006
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    Wonderful piece, so original and the rhythm and rhyme are great. I am sure the children will love this. Good luck at judging! Bunny


  • Beating Heart Baby
    May 28, 2006
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    great

    works so well
    you truely are good with words


  • Cherokee
    May 26, 2006
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    This will spark their little imaginations!


  • Celticpoet silver member
    May 26, 2006
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    I Love it!

    Im glad I am still a child at heart because I loved this poem...it makes me think of all the wonderful stories I read as a child and brings back so many pleasant memories!...thanks for sharing...Dan


  • wtchr
    May 26, 2006
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    I think you have caught the spirit of the contest. Children don't seem to be 'bothered' by the constraints we place on ourselves as adults. I think they deserve a short time of magic and fantasy. I believe it develops imagination and an early knowledge of real or make believe. Your poem is bound to please them. It is magical, colorful and geared to a childs point of view.


  • Smirnoff Ice
    May 26, 2006
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    A cute write that my daughter would love.Lovely!

  • coolchick
    May 26, 2006
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    Love it!!!

    Hey, I loved this write, it was cute and had much flow and fluency to each line.
    Good luck in the contest.

    -a coolchick


  • Jeremy0826 silver member
    May 26, 2006
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    This is such a cute little write. I love your creativity and think you did a great job with this. Thank you for sharing this!

    Allen0826

  • FindingFate
    May 26, 2006
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    This is a very creative entry. I wish you luck. I do have an opinion on a slight flow change. Please don't be offended as the piece is great and I will be reading it to my kids...

    The part that says...

    I nearly wanted to ask him his name
    Maybe I need a drink of water
    Maybe I'm just imagining this all
    Maybe it's because the weather just keeps getting hotter

    it might flow better like this...

    I nearly wanted to ask his name,
    maybe I just need a cold drink.
    I must be imagining this all,
    surely I must stop and think.

    Or something close to that. I hope you are not offended...Trina.

  • ea silver member
    May 26, 2006
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    Thank you for your catchy little poem which I anticipate the children of the Mother Goose Hour will enjoy. You'll be hearing more after they have had the chance to listen to this over the weekend...


  • Raeanne
    May 26, 2006
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    This is such a quaint little story! It's so cute and easy to read. I really enjoyed this and how it flowed so effortlessly. Awesome, awesome write and keep penning!!
    <333
    Raeanne


  • CiannaSplendiferous
    May 26, 2006
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    Awesome

    This is a very cute and sweet poem. You have a talent for making people smile. You should keep doing it. You'll get far in life.

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