My breasts are filled with sacred milk
As in my womb the world stays still
I grind and twist in beds of silk
I’m giving birth to daffodils.
The coat of dark warms up my feet
For I,unconscious, lay on grass
And naked drowning in the heat
I’m giving birth to lake of glass.
The deers pray for all this pain
To set me free so very soon
But while my lips are washed with rain
I’m giving birth to midnight-moon.
Oh,come my lover!Hold my hand!
As in my summer dreams I knew
For so beneath this world I stand
I’m giving birth to all,for you...
Author notes
Written May 25th, 2006
A contest entry
- I Believe in Love by Star Shine.
450 points, ended October 9, 2007, 15 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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The lines are eached filled with such description you take the reader on a trip full of images and emotion. Very creative, powerful. Well done.
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Mother of all you are, now that you've written this beautiful piece of art!
I loved it...no, I didn't. I adored it! Again, there is a difference! The last lines in each stanza(once I re-read it ) made me smile and say "Oh my God, this is good.VERY good!"
I especially liked the way...you were giving birth, one by one to nature(in your poem, represented by daffodils), then to water(the lake of glass), the sky (also seen there as the midnight-moon), and finaly, to all.
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Good Luck
I don't quite understand all the thoughts you were trying to portray and there was one error I found: deers should be deer. However, other than that, it was a great poem with lots of description. Great job. Good luck and best wishes
~jessica -
holy shit I LoVed this! I don't know what to say. My breath is taken!!
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diffrent from the rest.....quit incredible.....hmmmmmmmmm
thanks and good luck.
liv -
This was incredible, it really was.
I have to say thanks again for the comment on my work, and it was very much appreciated
Keep up the outstand work!
-Steph -
Thank you very much!It's one of my favourites!
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Beautiful. Has great imagery and is so deep. An amazing poem, something you would read in a famous poem collection book. Keep it up! Wonderful write!!!
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this was really cool. it was full of imagery, which i love.
great job.
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