Five frolicsome fellows, in Paris
Invested in gay-printed saris
"Venez vite!" roared their guide
"Each in gîte has to hide!"
So the first four complied (but not Garry)
First they looked up the Tour Eiffel
In case Garry had climbed there, to smell
Very fine scented Brie
'E loved cheeses, you see
So ripe fromages suited him well
"Fan out!" said their guide, "Try the Seine!"
It was then that it started to rain
Veiled in mist was l'eau
"'Ere, look out below,"
Sniffled Sid, who'd begun to complain..
Fine weather will never go wrong
It will soon be the end of my song,
Vera knows me of old
Even I have been told
"Stop that rambling, you go on too long!"
Final verse. Garry turned up O.K.
I have really not much more to say,
"Voici moi!" Garry yelled
Even klaxons were quelled
Seven gendarmes led Garry away...
Author notes
Written May 25th, 2006
A contest entry
- Accumulator Round 3 - by Vera Rich.
300 points, ended June 13, 2006, 5 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Nonsensicality by Myao.
425 points, ended May 30, 2007, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Celebrate 14 July... by Vera Rich.
600 points, ended July 22, 2008, 13 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
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Oh zut! Seine so does not rhyme with rain! Och but who cares. This is a grand piece of fun.
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Surely it rhymes in "franglais"?
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But does "Paris", "sari", and "Garry"?
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I'm a bit clumsy when it comes to accents, but I've managed , by deft cutting and pasting, to change the title to: La Gaitée Parisienne.
Only you, Vera, would spot that! I mostly avoided accents in the rest. Oh, I think there's a missing circumflex on gîte.
Best Wishes. -
Thank you for entering this... I was sad to have to disqualify this in my Accumulator competition... and so it is particularly welcome to see it again here. And the Franglais is neat and witty...
I think there is a typo in the title... or is this deliberate? -
Heh, I thought the style of this limerick poem was pretty nifty. The french throws me off a little, being as I've only had one year and some of the words were completely unfamiliar. However, I got the basic points of theh poem, which is not really what my contest was about.
In my contest, the authors note is really almost as important as the poem. Perhaps I was missing something from this, but since there is nothing here telling me I can't really be sure.
As a result, I have doubts that this will do too well in my contest, but I thank you for entertaining me and entering anyway! I still enjoyed it. I like limericks almost as much as haiku! -
I was most reluctant to have to disqualify this entry from the Accumulator Round 3 - but unfortunately the rules did specify that ALL the limericks did have to be about somewhere "of" a five-letter placename...
But the icing on the cake (the acrostics) cannot alas compensate for the non-inclusion of a vital ingredient.
However, that does not stop me (as a private individual) giving you an "applaud" (which I shall now do), and urging you to enter Round 4 - "Four for the Gospel-Makers". -
Acrostics! I missed them completely.
Thank you.
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Gratuitous asides are my speciality. Actualement, I was struggling for F.I.V.E.S., and it occurred to me that Vera might fill in for a V. Then, before I knew it, I'd put myself in as well. Subconscious wish to be out there with Garry, je crois. Bonne Chance, and well done for the gold.
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Keith, you are the master of limericks, and the addition of French to the mix is fun. The aside in #4 seems a little gratuitous, were there no more high-jinks to relate? Four frolicsome fellows had a grand time in Paris, and poor Garry had no fun at all.
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Un bon idee!
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Oui. Je pense qui'l a les vetements sales. N'est ce pas?
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You write such cheerful, nonesense poetry. You always brighten the day.
Quite an amusing little romp through gay Paree. Good luck in the contest. -
pauvre garry est\dans la laverie automatique? xx chillifemme
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Merci Bien! Il n'est pas possible pour pauvre Garry a respondez, parce qu'il est dans le gite encore. Son sari a besoin d'un seche-linge, je crois. Bonne chance, chilifemme!
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Not too long - where is he now??? - don't ya think he should stay there?!! Poor Garry. I sort of see him tarred and feathered with a plaited bunch of garlic and shallots where the sun don't shine.... quel fromage (if I have that right...!) x deb
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That's for me to ken and you to find out! Thanks for the praise.
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clever Keith, very clever. what did he do to be led away by 7 gendarmes?? You mould those words like clay on a potters wheel.
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