Don't walk away this time!
Feeling disbarred.......
Feeling damaged.....
Echos of lifeless whimpering....
Tears reverberate through....
WON'T THEY STOP...........
CREEPING IN, LIKE FAKE PEOPLE DO
Their mouth opens and starts a festering spew.
Trying to bring to the door, something right,
something true.
As my faith, it grows.
And as it grew.
As you know.
And you always knew.
I live life like there's no tomorrow.
Like your blues... I borrow
life and artfully twist the grain.
Like being insane,
like feeling the rain
gently turn the soul.
And flowers come alive and face the sun...........
Author notes
Written May 25th, 2006
age 30-35
A contest entry
- ANY THING by serenity silvermoon.
430 points, ended May 10, 2007, 145 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Dying is easy living is what kills us by Starz of Heaven.
550 points, ended July 3, 2007, 40 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Excellent Writing
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an amazing contemporary poem I love this and was reading it quickly to get through to the next words I read it three times a wonderful write...
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your message was clear
your flow was perfect
and this poem is packed with images great work
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Very pretty words to a heartfelt poem.Enjoyed truly..
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Like a rainy Sunday afternoon
wrought with ego-crushing self-pity and oceans of tears, this piece had me on my knees, brought me up from the floor and slowly turned my tear stained face to hope.
I love it.
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this is an easy piece to read which helps get the point across, i certainly enjoyed reading this poem. good luck and thanks for entering the contest !
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Wow this touched me and I don't know how it did, but it did . . . did that make any since?
good job
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This is a very nice write thank you for your entry best wishes to you and good luck in the contest xxxxx
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Niiice!
Man, this is without a doubt the best contemporary poem I've read in a long time. This is so fresh!
The flow was second to none...the word choice was right on! I'm adding you to my favorites.
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i like thsi a lot...it just has something about it that stands out from other pieces that i have read. This was an excellent write and I'm glad that you dedcided to enter it in my contest. thank you for entering and good luck in the contest
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Totally excellent every time. Keep up the wonders of a woamns heart and see what it shall bring.
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i love it, i loved how it seemed to climax to the end, just awesomeness, keep penning!
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wow this is amazing. it had a soft easy flow but insane feeling at the same time... this was really good. keep it up.
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This poem was so easy to read, and so easy to feel. And throughout all of this ease, you've managed to integrate something complex-- a rhetoric that is the antithesis of the literature. An ideal that's much more than your words would let on. A very terrific job.
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the feeling of melancholy is depicted and the poem brings tears to the eyes of the reader ! the reader feels herself mingled with the feelings of the poet! i loved this poem ! it is unique and a writen ina different way !
keep it up !
preets
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this is great!!! i really enjoyed reading it! it flows brilliantly and it was so easy to read. thanks for sharing it wit us. keep up the great work.
Til
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This is such a heartfelt piece, full of strong emotions which you have protrayed well.
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I like the flow of this poem, a feeling of strong emotion and having to hunt for the words to express it. very skillfully done.
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Excellent imagery here, there is a spiritual quality to this piece, which intrigues yet mesmorises. Agreat write
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When a poets mind transcends into darkness and his thoughts become the light of heart felt emotions that he uses to engrave
Upon his own flesh then his pen recieves a blessing and he creates an immortal picture to open up the eyes of the blind
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ummmm i think that was brilliant. i think it's the kind of poem that means something huge to you and lets each different reader apply it to situations in their own lives!! good job
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a haunting feeling your writing gave me
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Wow ... for some reason since I clicked on this poem your words really jumped out at me; you used a lot of simple words but somehow arranged them in such a gripping way I couldn't stop reading. You did an awesome job keep it up!
~Lonely~
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