i slam shut my eyes to taste your breath
(specifically that one second of apnea i grip tenuously until you are silent no more)
and wonder how, even in dream, you can be so tacitly talkative
--so loquacious that i can’t hardly get my own breath in before you interrupt and
speak of that which i have tongued but not seen
(the jabberwockies of your mind, how they infiltrate, we exclaim together)
but i hear you without my ears turned on
exploring your lungs and their atrophy
hoping to exceed where you excelled
and shake off our atmosphere too thick with air--
Author notes
words used (in order of appearance): specifically; loquacious; jabberwocky; atrophy; succeed
for this poem i was given a list of words and asked to incorporate them into a poem, which i then did.
Written May 24th, 2006
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Thank you for the read and the kind response!
Firstly: 'apnea' is defined by dictionary.com as: "Temporary absence or cessation of breathing".
Secondly: thank you for catching my spelling error ('the' versus 'they'). Very astute of you.
Thirdly: I purposefully left the 'i's lowercase - in fact, this piece was handed in for credit in school and I left everything on the page lowercase. It's a stylitic thing, I suppose.
Again, thanks very much. It's made my day to know someone enjoyed something of mine.
Take it easy.
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haha, your words were better than the listed ones. eh, i can't be bothered to get a dictionary, what does apnea mean? capatilise your i's. 'how the infiltrate'- shouldn't the 'the' have been 'they'? loved this piece. awesome use of language. creates a really chaotic, unclear picture in my head... but still shows a lot. a lot left unsaid. or partly said. hinted at. dark undertones! i think. lol. nice piece anyway, congrats.
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