sharp toothed kittens
tails standing straight like pikers
scowl into mirrors
Author notes
Is this contest NSA approved?
Written May 24th, 2006
In a list
A contest entry
- They hate us for our freedom and other myths by AJ Morelli.
1000 points, ended June 6, 2006, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Adorable
This is pretty funny, I have two cats and one kitten and they all tend to do this from time to time. What a very cute Haiku.
Tink
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I love this piece, not much to say except it is a great piece of writing. Not a word wasted and every one used to maximum effect. Scowling into mirrors with tail standing straight is a fantastic image and certainly one of the strongest in the contest. Thanks for entering.
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Tres GOOD!
Wholey Moose! I think the comment above says it all effective short sentences are only needed, a simple short metaphor is compelent and much more effective then great detailed 'blah blah' that I tend to abuse..! -
oops !it's in the haiku category, darn,pressed the wrong button.Thanks for the heads-up!
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This is quite unique, in its own way. I would not have realized that it's a metaphor if I had not seen that it's in Morelli's contest. Although your poem is shorter than my comment, those few words are effective and meaningful. Why exploit the reader with senseless explanations when you can say it in a short, detailed stanza. Great stuff.
Why is it in the erotica category?
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