Welcome to this
my body of enchantment
I believe this a place
you have not been before
An intoxicating presence
clouds your mind
Leaving you curiously
longing for more
Within you stirs
a place unknown
For your lips know only
the kiss of a man
I will persuade you
succumb to temptation
As I seduce you
as only I can
I near and a warmth
washes over you
A burning
breathless
rush
You are confused within
your consciousness
Your body
begs me
to touch
My breath takes you over
hypnotic
Feel it teasing at
your skin
Fire in my eyes
takes you from inside
I am your most desired
sin
Face to face
feel me
Intense pleasure
your body burns
Taking you to a place
of needing
My kiss
you obsessively yearn
My lips are merely
a breath from yours
The anticipation
is intoxicating
Senses peaked
you can barely breathe
You plead for an end to
the waiting
Closing my eyes
I bring your lips to mine
Like nothing you've
ever known
Such passion ignites
like you're grasping for life
Until your body is no longer
your own
My kiss it engulfs you
like poison
The entrancement of my spell
has been cast
Leaving you bound
by seductive lips
In such a kiss that may well be
your last...
Author notes
Written May 23rd, 2006
A contest entry
- Sinful Temptations by GirlNextDoor.
300 points, ended August 29, 2006, 21 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - POINTS- Easy Entries by NickelleteXninja.
600 points, ended July 8, 2008, 45 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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Seductive, beautifel... but lesbian?
lol
I wasnt 100% siure how to take it since I odnt know if you are a man or women..
I figured that since you said only a mans touch and your pretty much saying you'll give better that you are a women...
lol
I enjoyed reading this
tahnsk for entering
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Thank you so much! And CONGRATULATIONS to you as well!! I will return to read your winner!
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Nice one here.....congratulations on silver
A
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LOL
Did I read this right?
Was this some kind of lesbian fantacy?
Like that was so erotic that I"m going to have to log off for awhile! LOL
You are freak LOL
Man! You should unleash that from time to time you know. It not healthy to keep that built up.
And i have to say that even though I did enjoy this poem, I felt it dragged at the end. I don't know why! I guess i just wanted a big finale!
Great write you sensual woman you!
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outstanding
a visual seduction and very beautifully written -
This seems to me three poems in one. You have the regular text if you read it all the way through. You have the offset text, and can read it all the way through and then you have both together. In any format this is a winner! Great job.
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Whoaaaaa ... where's the ice bath when i need one?? This was terrific - such flow and a brilliant, erotic feel through it! Love it! i came to this poem through a comment of yours on an erotica contest which isn't allowing prewrites. You said you'd just written it and wondered if it could be submitted. The loss is the contest holders - this would have to be a winner. Another reason i'm commenting is that i saw you signed your name Michele. Now ... that spelling of Michele is so uncommon - i ought to know, it's my name and my spelling too!! Nice to see another one around! hehehe. Anyway, congratulations on a fantastic write. Blessed be.
rose (Michele)
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Thank you so much for your comments, I will take your suggestion and see what I can do to fix it
I really appreciate you reading and commenting!! -
this was really good as well as holding sensuality in its grip HOWEVER in one part of the poem, I tripped and re-read those lines again and still got that stumpy feeling...
As I seduce you
as only I can
I near and a warmth
washes over you
A burning
breathless
Where you have the 'I' in the third line, i really recommend that you take it out cause it feels like an annoying speedbump
Rae -
I LOVE THIS PORM ONE OF MY FAVORITES TO READ
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WOWOWOWOWOWOWOWIE, This is great. You really bring a poem to life. I loved it. The imagery was vivid to say the least. Good luck in the contest.
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Very Good write..You did an amazing job here. You can feel it as you read it. Good luck!!!!!!!!
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Awww, this was sooo good. Everyone's comments and the ones I would say could not do the poem enough credit. The flow was great- the rythm- even. VERY WELL DONE! AMAZING!
~ Julia -
thank you so much for your awesome comments and for taking the time to read! It's only going to be allowed in the contest though, if I write a new one as well, so, I'll have to see if something comes to mind in time!
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wow, this was beautiful, great write!! I'm almost sad I gave that idea for how to get it into Lit Lover's contest now, becuase I'm sure you'll beat mine! haha.
but in general, this was a very beautiful piece, and the background you choose really worked with it as well, matching the almost innocent seduction (for lack of better words..).
Thank you for sharing such a wonderful piece!
-Erin -
Very seductive poem. So
much passion expressed
creating great desire.
Very well written. Nice
visuals created by your
words. Great job.
Thank you for sharing.
Jeannie D Hunter
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Someone else who reads Sappho! Hehe.
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excellent
A very eloquent seductive poem that would make Saphho blush.
Good luck in the contest!
Scorpio Rising -
i feeling like getting a servant now in to fan me down lol i will have to make use of the elecric fan i think servants are to come by these days
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WOW. I was most certainly sucked in! I'm very glad you decided to enter ^_^ My heart is beating faster and I've got this goofy smile.. ;P
Is this about a woman and a.. woman? lol.
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Seems a cool ending as so many are...a lovely piece and good luck in the contest...
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Wonderful
This has to be one of the most beautiful pieces I have read. What wonderful passion and imagery you have shown. Your talent is just breathtaking thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest........Michael
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wow i loved it. you really are great. it was beautiful. your writing is truely amazinf. great job again
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Stinning
I am so glad I clicked on this one...
I really loved this...
Thank you for sharing...
I wish you the best of luck in the contest
Much Love
Tessa
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This is an amazing write, I loved it and you did awesome for the first time and the background matches perfectly for it. Good luck in the contest, you deserve a win for this one dear!!!
Keep penning!!
Emily -
truly enchanting
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Wow nice lines... i admire it..
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Wow...incredible!! You are a great writer! Your ability to draw in the reader...quite rare! GREAT JOB!!!! Keep up the fantastic work!!
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Pisces do have the this rare ability... to overwhelm its prey in the arts of seduction. well done. I was almost dissapointed the kiss arrived... thought you would have kept the foreplay up a while longer.... but then once began... the kissing is even more intense. good spped of delivery. The tone was farely aggressive and the structure was continuous in its form. A constant pressure of a seductor i would have to say. make sure your not too strong or... ill flitter away.
Thank you for a enjoyable salacious read.
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I really like this, it's so intimate I love the part about seductive lips. The words in this poem really pierce the mind and keeps me wanting more. I love how deep it is and yet it's so understandable. Beautifully written.
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Wow Pisces as always you left me speechless with your words. I enjoyed this write, thanks you for enetering and good luck.
Victoria
ps beautiful background
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