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An Oath of Love to You My Sultan

 

Where I know your nobility and gentleness
I'll be your lady chose me to provide
with respect and tenderness.

In our bed of bliss I will be your lover, not a slave,
I long for your virility to quench my desires;
catering to all your whims and craves.

For our oneness my heart and soul yearn,
my body will be the fertile land for your seed;
I cannot sail alone in the rough sea of this life to learn.

I’ll show to the world your beauty and my love to you,
defending your honor will be my duty and my joy;
together we'll be stronger, that’s only true.

I need your wisdom and your peace,
I will give you all my love and my trust;
to be your farm land to own me and to realise.

If I give to you, it isn’t submission, it is trust and a will,
to let you shape and construct the ship of our life;
the best way to make it special and fulfilled.

Baby try me and I will satiate your lust and fire,
I will immerse deep into your utter soul;
rid it of past with present desire.

You have allowed me to enter into your dreams,
just good thoughts, sheer wishes and hopes;
are my promise and I will take them to paradise gleams.

Author notes




When I wrote this I had nothing in mind and no one in mind, but these were and still are my wishes and what I vow to present to my love.

This piece is the outcome of a collaboration between and my Dear Sonja whose poetry I admire greatly and take me to A wonderful world of her creation.
Written May 23rd, 2006

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  • Amandainlove
    March 20
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    I like it.
    Good luck.


    • Nermin Nazim
      March 20
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      thank you

      love truly, and never despair or lose faith in love as God is Love my dear. All the best to you


  • Samantha Marie
    September 22, 2008
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    this is lovely
    thanks for entering
    good luck


  • Procrastination
    May 22, 2007

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    'Baby try me and I will satiate your lust and fire,
    I will immerse deep into your utter soul;
    rid it of past with present desire.'
    What an amazing, passionate verse, such heart and love went into this poem and that's easy to see.
    Goodluck in the contest.
    Emily x


  • Little Eagle Greeters member
    May 6, 2007
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    Thank you for your entry

    Very passionate and it has a traditionalist approach to it. The way you would expect a husband and wife to interact in the 50's. It seems to go back and forth between a woman and a man. As if each is making a promise to the other. I don't know if that was your intent but that is what I read from it.

    Thanks for the read and good luck.

    God Bless
    Tammy


  • mypassion
    August 28, 2006
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    Foreverlasting love! Words written from the heart,,Nicely expressed thanks for entering, and good luck, Brenda


  • Aun Ali
    August 11, 2006
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    I had no other thing to gift you on AP and also from such distance. Hope you like it.


  • WelshDragon
    July 25, 2006
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    Again, an excellent write. 3 line stanzas can be 'awkward', but these are soft flowing, gentle, and easy on the senses. I really love this piece. Superb.


  • Nermin Nazim
    July 24, 2006
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    thanks dear, it is me and Sonja, she is great!
    love ya


  • Iohagh
    July 24, 2006
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    Darling

    Let me hold your
    goblet of blessings sure
    transfused by a prayer
    before lips in air.

    Smoosh

    Janet


  • djmadturk
    June 8, 2006
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    bravo , really , it is great job . it is full of emotion and I hope you will place in contest . good luck ...


  • blondone
    May 29, 2006
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    these words are lovely, so well written and the they flow with ease love the imagery and your love shines bright with these words you write love that last stanza it's beautiful ... Good Luck in this contest....

  • Nermin Nazim
    May 25, 2006
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    If you propose to me, I will certainly tell you these words at the Altar!
    Edited on May 25, 9:46 p.m. because ''.

  • Nermin Nazim
    May 25, 2006
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    Thank you darling, you encourage me with your beautiful and kind kind words. i am glad you liked it and coming from you it is thrilling to me.
    love you much
    hugs

  • ogre1971
    May 25, 2006
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    excellent

    Wow! Is this for me? I'm extremely flattered. It is soooo beautiful! Will you call me and read it to me? Better yet. Come here and read it to me. I have to take you now . I feel now that my heart has been arroused to full capacity and the pent of pressure of that sensation is driving me wild. I will re-read this many times. Can you imagine reading this as an actual vow? That would be very rad and awe inspiring


  • May 25, 2006
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    So very exquisite, vows of a real and lasting love.
    Edited on May 25, 5:48 because ''.

  • Nermin Nazim
    May 24, 2006
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    I will make the correction. thank you dear. I am glad you like it. well i think when one's feelings are true, this is what one would love to do to the person one loves.
    kisses darling and thank you for your care.

    love you


  • NooNiThEWitcH
    May 24, 2006
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    Wonderful & Excellent

    This is really and I mean REALLY WONDERFUL and AMAZING!!!
    Excellent choice of words, rhyme and flow. I actually thought it was true!!!!
    It is very sweet, sincere, honest and romantic. It is how I feel or felt towards someome

    Just a correction in this line:
    "together will be stronger," the "will" should be "we'll" short of "we will"

    Keep on writing and good luck in the contest. I really hope you win with this!!

    Just curious if it is a collaboration, who gets to put the poem on their page?? or do you both put it on both pages?? lol Just Curious

    Love ya and I LOVE THIS POEM!!!
    Nooni

  • Nermin Nazim
    May 24, 2006
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    Thank you so much my dear Linda, you encourage me so much. and thank you for your good wishes. contest or other, that is what i feel and hope for and would promise to achieve my dear, providing that the other side is worthy of it and doesnt abuse of me!.

    love you


  • misticmoonlite gold member
    May 24, 2006
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    great job in this post, nice flow and good promises of honor to your loved one, nice collab.. thank you for sharing and good luck..Linda

  • Nermin Nazim
    May 24, 2006
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    Darling thank you for your beautiful words. you are so nice really, i am really bashful in front of all the wonderful and kind words you told me. well you borrow whatever you like without asking. and i hope and ask the Lord to give us a Man, a real man to whom we'd really love to tell these words from the bottom of our hearts

  • Nermin Nazim
    May 24, 2006
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    Thank you my dear friend. you honor me with your words. would it get through and be understood to the other party? well that is mys question. we'll know someday. i am not in a hurry

  • Nermin Nazim
    May 24, 2006
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    OOOOH thank you darling, my heart melts and i feel sooo happy to hear from you and your your heartfelt and so nice prayers and words. i wish that for the both of us!

  • Nermin Nazim
    May 24, 2006
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    My darling thank you much, yes, I feel so so much, it comes from the bottom of my heart, but whether it reaches the targetted hearts? that is what i dont really know.
    lots of love
    and your words always give me courage Rhanea dear

  • Ir.muse
    May 24, 2006
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    This is so beautiful my dear Nermin. I'm glad you and my dear Sonja can work together so well.
    Wish you luck in the contest.

    Shahrzad

  • blondone
    May 24, 2006
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    this is beautiful and beautifully written your love shines through with these words you write great vows you've done a great job and Good Luck to you in this contest....


  • 0darkAngel0
    May 24, 2006
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    beautiful piece
    your hubby to be will love it
    much love for you my cleopatra


  • Manoj Sanyal
    May 24, 2006
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    Beautiful... straight from heart.


  • Be-Gentle
    May 23, 2006
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    Romantic

    No matter what the critics say..if it comes from your heart..you feel it..it's perfect to you..I loved it..If I ever marry again...Far. Far.into the future..lol..Maybe I'll ask to borrow some of it...


  • Nermin Nazim
    May 23, 2006
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    I will try to fix it. We'll see what Sonja will chose to do.


  • u took my user name
    May 23, 2006
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    as jkh said, the last stanza neds a little work. maybe you might want to say " you have allowed me" and some minor changes to fit that for the rest of the stanza.

    other than that, this is very well written. It shows true love, and a relationship that will last for an eternity, enveloped in love and a sweet aura on every adventure that life holds for the lovers.
    Bravo. congrats on such a nice collaboration poem.
    best wishes,
    Neri

  • Nermin Nazim
    May 23, 2006
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    Thank you so much. Maybe in the back of my mind, unconsciously I wanted him to propose, which I desire of course, so instead I said the words!
    thank you for your encouragement.

  • jkh
    May 23, 2006
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    Its good. Though the end stanza makes it seem like more of a proposal than a set of vows. I liked it though and you did what I asked. Good job.

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