Too Close to the Flame
A dirty game
a risky pathway
littered
with dead friendships
a ghost town
of people you can't see.
Love stained hands
break what they touch
Sex is safer
intimacy dulled
by latex.
Unprotected love
drips danger.
Author notes
The aftermath of getting too close
Written May 23rd, 2006
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A revisit to applaud again....
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Thank you for commenting on my poems. This piece actually reminds me of "Curious Vase" because it is about the same thing; my metaphor may, however, be too ambigious. This poem literally LEAKS sin in every descriptive word. You strike a powerful image in few words, I love it.
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oh wow... that was amazing! i totally can relate to this! it reminds me of how i felt afterwards and how i just wanted to forget... wow! amazing job!!! im slightly speechless.....
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Well, no change in how I feel about this. It's 'awesome' - oh god did I really post that comment? Shoot me. I could also say 'keep on writing' and 'well penned' and 'like this was an awesome read' but I just really like and relate to this, so there!!! They all ask (your comments) what point you are making - did you ever tell them? If not, tell me (I can't keep a secret though....!)x (yep, bored of worthing) huggers debbers
Edited on Jul 11, 4:00 p.m. because ''. -
too close I was
This doesn't just resonate for me - it reverberates and and and then totally deafens me - pass the tissues - yes, yes, yes I only want the tissues cos I'm sad - OK? -
agony
Oh yes. This really does 'apply'..... x chills/debs -
Keep looking back at this one. I really like it a lot.
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Brilliant!
This is a very interesting poem in my opinion. That phrase, same as everyone else "intimacy dulled by latex". It sticks in my head, and so I have to question it.
There are so many ways that this poem could be taken, thats really good!
Fantastic poem, the form suits it really well! A lot is said in those few words, very hard skill!
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latex.. there are some who think it's the height of romance.. and strangely enough I think they'd fit in well in the place this write resides.. ( makes sense )...
love is a strange thing to me.. at the best of times.. and more often it seems lust in disguise.. but I won't go into that.. anymore than I did in the workshop..
I do see the irony in this.. we find so many ways to keep ourselves from being exposed to the thing we say we need/crave/want or desire.. don't we? .. because it's 'too close' to live with.. except it seems that most of the time ..we only see that in the sordid images we say.. aren't love.
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Maybe it is lust and not love.
Interesting take on the issue and certainly latex is not very romantic, but then neither is being terminally ill. 
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Good
Hmm...interesting poem. I like the form. I've tried to write poems like this...with broken sentences so to speak but they dont turn out quite right. You've done a good job! I like this line: "Sex is safer intimacy dulled by latex." Although you can have great intimate sex while using a condom.
Just depends on the guy and the girl.
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I really like thissss.
"littered
with dead friendships
a ghost town "
my favorite part.
but what exactly is your purpose for writing this?
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thats was cool i loved how u went from sex and used latex that was cool cuz we all kno what is made of latex thats used for sex haha but i guess idk what ur trying to say in it?
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You really know how to turn a phrase that sticks in people's minds! But, I still wonder what statement you're making.
Thanks,
Anne -
nice
wow. very interesting. sex is safer? don't you mean loveless sex? anyway, great job. -
Excellent write! I really enjoyed reading this. Like everyone else i particularly liked
"Intimacy dulled
by latex"
I dont know why, it just sits with me. Even after i've finished reading!
Well done mate!
Cheers
Danoz
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Great poem. Good message.
Well stated. There are
so many interruptations
for this. Deep thoughts.
Good job.
Thank you for sharing.
Jeannie D
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this is really good!
i like this a lot yo.
its really good
i should feel the flame
haha
sry
well great write
and keep it up!!!
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Awesome write!! Intimacy dulled by latex. I love those words. Dulling the intimacy is worth it for me.
I look forward to reading more of your work.
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This is tighter and better than the draft you sent me. But I'm still thinking about what is 'too close'. I think you are right. Sex is not really intimacy. In a sense, sex IS quite 'safe'. Intimacy requires minds meeting. And maybe that is more dangerous - but possibly only if accompanied by sex? If you managed that small feat that would be one hell of a brilliant relationship!! Oh, I don't know - jury's out.
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Sex is safer
intimacy dulled
by latex.
Unprotected love
drips danger.
WOW!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! WOW!!!!!!!!!!!! WOW!!!!!!!!!
This is sooo good. This is a very important message and I'm glad you made it so clear.
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