My child, whom I hold dear and close to heart,
I smile at you and want to hold you tight;
I watch you dream and wonder where to start
to teach you what my Mother taught me right.
To have your mind sustain a soul that’s pure
throughout this life be loving to your friends;
the path will make your happiness secure
and guide you through until your journey ends.
But life will throw you curves you have to meet
I pray you will emerge, unscathed, though wise,
to find the life ahead that you may seek
the happiness that brings you clear blue skies.
Go find the peace you seek as dreams unfold
and fill your life with joy that's yours to hold.
Joan Benecke May 23rd 2006
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Oil painting by Pino Daeni
Written May 23rd, 2006
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Great Work!
Joan you know that I don't know anything about the different forms of poetry and only throw mine together in hopes that it will come out in some kind readable type that may or might not be called poetry. That is why I try to make most of mine rhyme in some way or another. I want to tell you that I think this is a wonderfully well written piece, though, that I sure did enjoy sinking my teeth into for a bite of good poetry.
Damon -
A mother's love!
But life will throw you curves you have to meet
"I pray you will emerge, unscathed, though wise,
to find the life ahead that you may seek
the happiness that brings you clear blue skies."A mother's mind is so sweetly expressed dear friend.The use of a sonnet for this poem on motherly love is very much appreciable. The oil painting is very beautiful and taken me to reality .Tahnk you for sharing.
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Wonderful sonnet you have penned here - lovely rhythm rhyme, images created through the words you have written. Picture is a pleaser too. What wonderful things to say to one's daughter.
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Dear Bea,
Although I have already commented (twice) before on this lovely sonnet, it loses nothing in re-reading.
I can only repeat my invitation to let me know when it is free of contest and I'll assign a Wyleian number to it.
Don't forget to send me the link so I can feed it into the collection.
Congtatulationms, love and hugs, XXX Hugh.
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Thankyou dear Friend for the honour of including my poem into your Wyleian Sonnets. I have removed it from the contest and have made you colab in case you need it to add this poem to your chapbook.
love Bea
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What a beautiful sonnet, full of loving advice from Mother to daughter. The picture is gorgeous, and your sonnet is perfect in form and rhyme. I really enjoyed it.
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Thank you for taking the time to enter. We appreciate your talents. Best of luck to you
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Oh! There is so much wisdom written here, so much love, and insight. We love our children with all that is inside our spirits. This is an inspiration for Mother & Child. Beautifully written, and heartfelt. I wish you well in this contest my Sister.
Always ♥
Renee
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Dear Joan
Lovely poem - in this day & age I wish it was as simple. We all wish the best for our children and just hope they can overcome the hazards of today. Well done.
Love & hugs
Anne
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crystaldust 27-05-07 12:52
Beautiful sonnet and thoughts well expressed. Go for a win. Joy
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this has lovely thoughts and feelings set through it. If only it was that easy
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Lovely, lovely poem with some great wishes and advice.
I've no children of my own I could wish or hope this for, but my niece whom I'm very close to...yes, this is exactly what I wish for her. Beautiful form also. Good luck to you in the contest and thank you so much for sharing.
Best wishes,
~J.
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Wonderful poem Joan! A perfect read for a saturday morning
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excellent~
Just beautiful sweetie....
I didn't know it was a Sonnet until I got done reading it..
Best of luck in the contest....
Hugs
Susan~~~
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Joan, this is a lovely poem, I really enjoyed it. The sentiments expressed made me smile and it makes me excited for the opportunity I will have one day to mold a young child into a responsible, pleasurable, spontaneous, creative (the list could go on and on...) adult who is ready to face whatever life may throw. Best of luck!
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Dear A/J, I loved your poem before when I first read it. And I still do. Very beautiful.
Love Jen
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BEAUTIFUL!
i really cant remember if i have read this before but it is WONDERFUL! it sent shivers up my spine and my eyes welled up big time. it is beautiful! well worthy of a trophy i say!
loves ya lots
Til
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Beautifully penned and heartfully read. I have a daughter I wish would read this...as probably do all mothers.
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I love this also
Such wise sentiment. Beautiful Joan.
Hugs
Jan -
Dear Joan
Beautiful and well written favorite to children everywhere. I would like my children to have heard this from me. I love it!!! Best of luck in the competition sweetheart.
Hugs and love,
Petratani
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Dear A/J
What a lovely written Sonnet.
And it's true we do want our children to be happy and well and grow into solid citizens. Wonderfully written.
Good luck.
Hine.
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Dear Bea,
I think no less of this beautifully written, graceful and sincere sonnet than I did when I first read it.
Indeed, I should have invited you to include it in the Wyleian collection and, perhaps, when this contest is over, we may do so and I will assign an earlier number for it so that it will appear in its correct order chronologically.
It is certainly a worthy choice as your best poem although you have written many others that would have made your choice a difficult one.
Best of luck in this contest voting.
Applause, love and hugs, XXX Hugh R.
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Beautifully written sonnet!
Very lovely words of wisdom and advice for your loved one. Best of Luck in this contest!
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Love,
Maureen
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Beautiful
and is what we all wish for our children. A very nice sonnet. good luck
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Oh Joan, this is just divine! You have carried this form off just lovely. Hugh is a great teacher 
This is really breathtakingly beautiful. I adore it, so full of heart. Blessings and Love, Gypsy
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Thank you wattle for your lovely comment, until I master it completely, they are very hard to do, but very rewarding.
Hugs Joan
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Ms angelica, A beautiful thought provoking poem. I'm told Sonnets are the hardest and can be made to work by only the best. Your the best, thank you.
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well well Jen, this is a nice surprise to have you comment, I'm very happy to see you here and I'm glad you liked my Sonnet. Yes, Hugh is a great Teacher, THE BEST!
Hugs Joan
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Dear Joan, this is a very lovely Sonnet you've written, you certainly have a good teacher, I love the way you have expressed the desire of a Mother for her child to grow and learn. Well done.
Jen.
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Thank you Sweetpea, All fixed
Love Joan
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Dear Joan, you have shown mother-love very beautifully with this sonnet, in fondness and wishes for a safe future. The meter is very sure and the rhymes are good; except "secure", I think it has reversed word order. In line 1, I wonder if "whom" is indicated, and I would be tempted to avoid the whole question with a direct address.
Good work!
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wow. sonnets just seem so difficult, but this one's really good! I hope you feel like you accomplished a lot by writing it, because I know I could never do it, lol.
This is really touching, really sweet. I liked the 2nd stanza the most, it just...I dunno. I thought it was really nice. This poem reflects you, I think--it's kind and friendly, just like you. Thanks for sharing!
~blessings~
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Thanks Jan, I'm learning, but it's still hard finding the right words to use, and he's such a hard taskmaster, but I wouldn't have it any other way.
Lovesya my Friend.
Joan
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Well if you hadn't dicussed your Teacher Pupil connection. LOL I would never have guessed that you were not already perfect with this form.
You are such an awesome poet Joan. I just loved this. beautiful my friend.
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Thanks Kenny for your lovely comment.
Joan
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Hi Brucie my friend, it's been awhile since I've seen you, I'll be round to visit your page my dear girl.
Love Joan
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Thank you smiley(yvonne)
Love Joan
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Dear rhymingoof, thank you for your lovely comment, it's much appreciated.
Hugs Joan
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Thank you my darling Pixie for your wonderful comment and I love to see your light on AP too.
Love AAAJ
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Dear Hugh, thank you for your lovely comment, I've fixed the part up you suggested, and you're meant to be picky, how else will I learn TEACHER?
Hugs Bea
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gorgeous words
This is a really well written poem,and the words are so amazing,very uplifting.Thank you for sharing this with us Joan,it's absolutely gorgeous.Kenny -
Dear Bea,
I know how you struggled to get the words you wanted and the meter right for this poem and I am proud of your determination and perseverance which has resulted in this charming sonnet.
In this final version my intrusion was minimal. You did nearly the entire sonnet on your own without further help from me and it is immeasurably better than the two earlier versions which I corrected.
Of all my sonnet pupils, Bea, YOU are the star! That's because you don't 'give up' on it. Well done!
Re-reading the sixth line I find the word 'towards' rather awkward as it scans as "towards friends". I suggest that "to your friends" would be smoother? If you want to avoid saying "your" twice in the line, try "throughout this life be loving to your friends". (Picky, aren't I?)
Applause, love and big hugs, XXX Hugh.
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The is a trul beautiful piece, and so true of life and the way a mother teaches her child and helps them along. I think it show amazingly the confidence every mother has in her child to do the right thing no matter what life throws at them. I especially liked the phrasing in the third stanza "But life will throw you curves you have to meet" Its just so very true. I'm sorry that I have not been online for a long time, I've moved in with my boyfriend and don't have interenet access in our unit, I'm at my parents right now, but I will check in whenever I can. A beautiful piece, well done.
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this was beautiful...
Yvonne
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wonderful
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Thankyou dear Pixie, I have been working on it for over a week, I just couldn't get it right, kept sending to Hugh to Edit. "You can do better""Keep trying" So I did
Love you AAAJ
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Fabulous!
HI AAAJ.... I smiled to see this sonnet for you have blossomed as a poetic sonnet rose. I am so happy for your learning the sonnet form as seems to be your poetic calling. My heart feels light and happy and lit a smile upon my face just like your name lights happiness in my heart whenever I see. God Bless You and Hugh A LOT, AAAJ. With much love, Pixie
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