Written Words
only for a fingertip for the best
to
my touch
now
escapes me
that is more to shout my touch
slipping from my grasp
a definition coming through
soft shapes, their ridges and still today
their light fades for me
as two souls into the best
unblushing, my friends, I love so strong
unblushing, my friends, I couldn't do
with the last touches of the wind
written words
written words
is how I knew
when my mind of slowly to be is a thousand eclipsed moons
the east
that's
when the rain
the river,
soaks and cleans me
our reuniting has thrown me blind
but it's a burn, a breakdown
as .....................................
a darker gray breaking through a lighter one.
Steven Mels
Author notes
i was having a contest and i want to also write a poem about it...lol oh well.
Written May 22nd, 2006
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We all put our hearts and souls into writing because that is what feeds us but neither reading nor speaking these words illuminates my mind. So the poem has no power or charm - my loss I guess but I can't make what isn't there into something that is.
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Wow, pops. This is so unique. My eyes were on a playground reading this. I loved it! ^.^
I like this style! ^.^
Love ya, pops.
Your AP Daughter!
♥ Tawni
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MakingLove -
WONDERFUL JOB!!!!!
My dear sweet, Son, Steven
As always you have come up with the proper words to express the love and happiness you feel in your heart..... I wish you and whom ever it may be the best and most wonderful happiness to be......
This piece of poetry has been written with heartfelt emotions and sincerity, great make-up, and a new form has been used here, that gives it a special kind of umph.....
Although I am biased -becuase you are my son- It is a nicely written piece, and I have enjoyed reading it.....
Be blessed my steven..... I love you and miss you very much.....
Please be happy and and have inner spiritual peace in your heart always.....
Keep up the good work, I loved this new "YOU"
Love always, MoM
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This was a beautiful poem,also heartbreaking.You remind me alot of me a few years ago.Good work, I think the best poem for your idea for the contest came from you.
good luck and God bless
Vini
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This is very good..and very creative. I just love your work...it is always such a gift. I am glad I took the time to stop by and read.
LIZ -
new way on the road
I am glad you are back and with a new inspirational form. Revealing the translation of the soul with a new voice to sing your souls news of transition. Sens all the world gently in all new ways listin to the earths voice and tell me more, I always thirst even in the rain. Annie
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this is very different to me but this piece turned out so well, thanks for sharing this piece and keep up the awesome poetry here...
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This reveals the hurt you must be going thru my baby boy. Its good you can express yourself so well in the words of this poem. Keep writing son....
Thx for sharing.
Mama Linda
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Liked this verse you wrote for the contest, but cannot enter. LOL Interesting use of space - unusual ending.
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This is such a beautiful poem. It brought a big smile to my face.
The written word says a lot of different things. Keep up the awesome poetry!!!
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I loved this, my dear! Very well done! Love ya!
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very nice write and form.. good luck with it..
Linda -
Wow! Pretty damn awesome. That is what I say.
Hope you are well.
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