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I Carry On

Love may perish
pain abounds

but in the darkness
a trumpet sounds

Bringing me home
and this astounds

For the limitless grief
had filled my mind

Taking me down
sneaking up from behind

Author notes

I don't think this is done yet...I don't know, it depends on how it sounds when I read it tomorrow...I might add on...
Written May 22nd, 2006

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  • TiredxandxTorn
    June 15, 2006
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    great job! i like the flow of it. i think that it could use more , but it is also great the way it is! good job and keep it up!