i don't want to think
i don't want to feel
i just want to forget
but i can't
i feel so small
it wasn't a big deal
why does it still hurt so much?
was it rape
or just assault?
does it matter?
i want to disappear
why?
why did you do it?
you made me bleed
why didn't you just kill me?
i wish you had
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Written May 22nd, 2006
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There's not a lot I can add to the above. This is a powerful write conveying your anger and hurt. I hope you find a way to move on. Great poem!
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i am sorry that this is what your life is. it makes me angry at the one who did this to you. thank you for being brave enough to write about it. hope2makeit
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you know i love you
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Wow. I've been there. How awful. This is a really great write.
'i feel so small'
Amazing. Keep your head high.
I'm applauding you.
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I am not sure if your words are true but if they are a token of my mind I will write for you alone. If the words are true then you have been given a chance to change or do something that is the reason you are alive. The words have great impact in the simplicity the punch of each word makes you want to cry. But the cruelty of the world doesn't allow it. So you sit reading something so powerful blow after blow and realize that amongst the pain and cold detached emotions there is beauty in the words. Painful beauty. graceful in your elegence I see a young woman sitting at a fountain wishing for the death that she was denied but not willing to end it herself. Not becuase shes afraid but because she has the courage to stand for what others have forgotten. That is what I pictured when I read this. She was beautiful as I am sure you are. Keep writing whatever your heart speaks for words are much more beautiful once they are shared.
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It would be a vast improvement if you could cut out 3/4 of the 'I's and 'me's. There is pain and emotion here, I guess, but there is no verbal creativity, no poetic device or dynamic that really sheds an extraordinary light on your pain. In short, I would use this as the rough draft of what you want to say, and then write a real poem around it.
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Hi, I undertand your hurt and feeling soiled but it will pass nature is a clever lass and time is a great healer, you must pick up the pieces and put it behind you, not easy I know but you will,there is a brave new dawn tomorrow, hugs Di
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