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honey dew

sweetened lips divine
caressing fingers tease
cupped breathy mounds
entices me
to new heights of ecstasy
tongued to hardened points
laying suckled at her breast
an altar of flesh raised in homage
with moistened lips aflame
loins on fire
watching with pendulum grace
her sway
her breasts sweet to the touch and taste
in mortal homage
and nectared delights
I would stay enraptured
'tween her hips and thighs
for but to taste
and probe
forever... mine

Author notes

AP name: myriad-dark

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  • Serenity-words
    August 21

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    For my second time round reading this.
    Now I love this poem no doubt about that, but I think this poem is a little to blunt in what I was asking for.
    I wanted deep beautiful sensuality, and while this is beautiful, I think it's a little to sexually straight forward.
    Thank you, don't talk my comment the wrong way, I do love this poem.
    ~Serenity


  • Perception
    August 3

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    Very nice... sensual piece... Very nice..
    Good luck in your contests
    - Perception


  • Dezzy26
    August 3
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    I like this peice, very sensual. ty for entering my contest.

  • Serenity-words
    July 7
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    So sexy. You did just a beautiful job with this.
    Loved it, loved it.

    Favorite lines
    "laying suckled at her breast
    an altar of flesh raised in homage
    with moistened lips aflame"

    ~Serenity


  • BluRosePoet8488
    June 16

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    Nice write. just a bit too intimate for this contest.
    This is just one element of intimacy. Thank you for entering and good luck! Keep the ink flowing!
    ~Donna~


  • perfectsunset gold member
    March 12

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    Such a beautiful write with lots
    of sensual imagery & romance.
    A most lovely write!!

    Thanks for entering & best of luck


  • genevieve3
    January 17
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    nice imagitry


  • ForeverLastingComa
    December 4, 2008

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    This is a very nice piece, although a big distraction to me was your background choice. It bothered me a lot. All in all this was a nice write.

    Thank You For Entering And Good Luck!!


  • Dragon Of Darkness
    December 2, 2008
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    what a great poem

  • piccola silver member
    June 25, 2008

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    this has some great imagery and I learned from it. My erotic vocab increasing. (along with my temp.) thank you for entering has an all new meaning lol


  • Riftkin gold member
    May 23, 2008

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    this is sensuous, very well written erotica
    a perfect example of how true erotica should
    be delivered. and I think you have blown my
    poem out off the door.

    Best of luck to you

    Riftkin


  • theredcatjazzoflove gold member
    May 22, 2008

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    sexy! i loved it i think you did a very great excellent job here thanks for sharing a sip of your writing drin

    Lady Jazz


  • xxRainbowDawnxx
    March 12, 2008

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    This is very deep and erotic indeed. I can almost imagine what you are doing here and what you are playing to take on later on. This is very hot, I would love this to be done to me, or for me to do it. Nicely done.


  • Tarja
    November 17, 2007

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    Congrats on the honorable mention, this had amazing imagery and word choice, I think you did an excellent job. Well done.

  • Sam-a-nantha
    November 17, 2007
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    I think I love your style. You're unique, and I feel like I can see into your mind. Beautiful.


  • 2lullabyhaven
    October 8, 2007

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    Wow, you take passion seriously, don't you? thanks for you entry into my contest lol


  • MrsPepper
    September 9, 2007
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    Very sensual and sexy...nice metaphor


  • hypnotice
    September 7, 2007
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    now this is wat i am talking about


  • CassidyEngle
    July 21, 2007

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    this is a very good poem but reahcves under the minmal lines that was said in the contest, if you want I will except this if you add one more line just to make it twenty


  • Dalaney gold member
    October 4, 2006
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    I can only echo what those have
    said before me...this is sensuous,
    very well written erotica - a perfect
    example of how true erotica should
    be delivered. I am a firm believer
    that some things need to be left
    for the reader to imagine, and you
    have done this, artfully so...
    Love,
    Lane


  • honey bear
    May 22, 2006
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    very good

    a soft and sensual read my friend thank you for sharing this with us and keep up the good work,good luck in the contest


  • dutch2lips gold member
    May 22, 2006
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    This is a great piece myriad-dark, very sensual
    Thank you for joining my contest and good luck to you in it!

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