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it just needs some flavor, that's all

I told you I need more trinkets,
baubles and blessings to remember us by.  
to leave them behind
is to leave them forever,
and I don't think I could.

I don't think I could
but maybe I should,
and this is just another
hesitation that I'm used to.  

sometimes I wonder if
you would pepper this moment,
pepper it
with tart tearstains of loss and
perpetually shifting glances,
but I don't think you could.

would you?

Author notes

not exactly sure what this came from, and it's not what I was thinking of when I created this pen name, but here it is regardless!
Written May 21st, 2006

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  • Indifference
    June 4, 2006
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    I just stumbled upon your author page, and I'm definitely glad I did. I really, REALLY like your style. This is wonderful.

  • Alexandra Saint
    May 31, 2006
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    A+

    I love the title, it really fits you and the poem. And how it's not IN the poem or anything, I love doing that. ^^

    And I think you wrote a poem that people can relate to. And I love it.

    Kudos, and good luck!


  • jantastic gold member
    May 30, 2006
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    The second stanza is so relatable (for myself at least). I like this. (I know it sounds like a lame comment but really it isn't!)

  • anne
    May 23, 2006
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    man, luckily for you you have an awesome user name which translates into an excellent poem.

    first off, i think "I told you" is a very nice opening for a poem. kind of sets something off right away. and then of course the incorporation of "pepper this" worked very well, as it is a neat thought especially in regards to a moment.