Said a Fairy to a sparrow, "Behold I am in love,
And my heart is soaring higher than the clouds that float above.
Yet my soul is somewhat weary, for my mind is overcome,
with the wonder and the magic, yet confusion of my love."
Said the Sparrow to the Fairy, "My dear I must implore,
Please tell me of this magic love, this wonder you adore.
Has he knowledge of your worship? Does he feel the same?
And my darling if he doesn’t, does he even know your name?"
Said the Fairy to the sparrow as she rested on a lea,
"Tis quite confusing circumstance, my true love and me.
At times he seems so distant, at times he seems so cold,
so noble yet so arrogant, insolent and bold.
Yet as if I were a beauty far surpassing angles fair,
I've come to catch him time to time in almost trancefull stare,
As if his world stops turning to grant him time to cast his eyes,
upon a quiet simple thing as plain and odd as I."
Said the Sparrow to the fairy, "has he ever spoke a line,
of what or how he feels for you if granted his sweet time?"
Then so softly to the Sparrow, the Fairy did reply,
with her wings bent low towards the ground and sorrow in her eyes.
"I've pondered would he seek me, if my locks were like the rays,
of a bright red autumn sunset on the loveliest of days.
Or if my eyes were greener than the fair foliage of the trees,
And yet would all this ever make him cast his eyes on me?"
Said the Sparrow to the Fairy, "Darling you are fair,
you've the kiss of snow upon your skin and sunlight in your hair.
hail your reflection in the dewdrop, come now why are you so low?
'Tis not as if the sun has died or winds no longer blow.
You should not waste your time upon someone who cannot see
the beauty of your heart and mind, please tell me you agree?"
Then said the Fairy to the Sparrow, "Thank you for your wisdom friend.
But I’m afraid my secret love shall never have an end.
For until he finds the courage, to look into my eyes,
To speak of how I love him, I will seek to search for mine."
Author notes
This poem was written to represent two friends having a conversation about the man the one friend loves.
I dedicate it to my friend Chrissy: the sparrow full of advice. Stanza five represents my desire to be the figure of celtic beauty that he, the desired, desires in a woman. red hair and green eyes, in place of my blonde hair and blue eyes. There is a great deal of meaning behind this.
A contest entry
- Publishing Poems.... by Radiant Eclipse12.
400 points, ended March 2, 2007, 14 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Fantasy Realm [surprise me] by ForgottenMemories.
580 points, ended March 4, 2007, 12 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - MY HUMONGOUSLY AWESOME KINDAH FANTASY CONTEST! by HarvesterOfHearts.
700 points, ended September 7, 2007, 18 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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Wonderfully spoken and written.
I found this to be an enchanting poem that made my heart sing with admiration. 
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oops, I just realized this does not fit your description for the contest, it has won a few trophies, I have another one that I will enter
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Because I got so many entries, I am going to judge this a little different than I normally do. On the contest page the challenge was to write a rhyming poem that shows instead of tells, with imagery and metaphor galore. In addition to those things, I am going to take the meter and rhythm into account along with originality. So I am going to award points for each of those things and then sort of tally them at the end to decide on the winners.
Show vs. Tell: 70/100
Concrete Imagery: 70/100
Metaphor/Symbol/Allusion: 70/100
Originality: 90/100
Meter: 100/100
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Wonderful
Gold, Gold and worthy of many more Golds. What a wonderful woven fairy tale you weave. It has drawn me into it's magic spell danced with me to it's rhythm. Truly wonderful.
xx
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Soaring...
A poem that soars and sparkles!
I would very much like to post this on Poetry Planet! 
It is beautiful and makes me happy!
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This is excellent allegory. It has good meter and the rhyme is natural.
Good write. Congrats on winning gold.
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this is astounding! i can almost never find poems with faerie's and magik in them without them being dark... not that there is anything wrong with that but....
i absolutley adore this poem... it' such a sweet story. and the language used is impeccable
you have exceeded my expectations for this contest... such a great fantasy write!
best of luck though you may not need it!
~lostelvenchild
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a good piece and a great atmosphere you give to the reader, i like looking in the poems that are first posted for i tend to throw my personal favs in and i think others do too with that - this is a good smiling poem
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Enchanting
This is really beautifully written with both a magical air to it and the deeper emotional undercurrent. Lovely piece, good luck with the contest. -
beautifully written. you have captured many emotions in your lovely poem. It is partiarly a fantasy piece but then it is about love also. I very much enjoyed it. Before I forget, please put what option you chose in the authors box. Good luck in my contest xxShadowEaterxx
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The flow is beautifl but I felt their wasn't any orginal meatphors or similies that could of enhanced this poem to an upper level. yet i love the how you puttin gthe fearie in it that's what led me to read it and the layout indeed fit with this magical peice.
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very lovely.. and enchanting... the sparrow.. filled with wisdom.. reminds me of myself giving those who need help the options to leaving their pain and find enlightenment.... your poem really touched me.... this was very well written and thought outperfectly.. best wishes on your poem
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Wow! Oh my! This completely blew me away! I love the scenario! This is not a twist on any fairytale (as far as I can tell), but that in no way takes away from the fact that this is an archetype of great poetry. I love everything about this piece. The word choice is eloquent and graceful, and flows throughout the poem well, as if a lullaby or song. The dialogue is convincing of the creatures that would be speaking it. I just really loved this piece, and I thank you very much for entering the contest! ^_^
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Then said the Fairy to the Sparrow, "Thank you for your wisdom friend.
But I’m afraid my secret love shall never have an end.
For until he finds the courage, to look into my eyes,
To speak of how I love him, I will seek to find mine."
Truely very heartfelt and very touching work indeed..
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Wow. This is poetically written. A story in rhyme, and a story we've all lived before to some degree. Nicely done.
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Awww that was so adorable and sad and beautiful and awww---you know it was an excellent write. Robinrae.
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This reads very well. I Like the overall feel of the poem. It seems to be practical advice weaved wonderfully into a story of fantasy. Thank you for taking the time to enter it here.
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This was so lovely and comfortable. It catches very interesting, comfortable emotion of two friends, not to mention the playfulness of them being a fairy and a sparrow. It rhymes well, even if at points it didn't flow as well. This is very amazing even then, good job.
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This is a very good write that you had penned here good luck in my contest
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This is delightful...I never use that word in my everyday life but it seems to fit this. Very sweet and cute write.
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Fascinating
Welcome to AllPoetry
Beautiful fantasy write, smooth and flowing and such a wise little sparrow! Thank you for a wonderful, uplifting read. Keep penning, Poet
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Very Lovely!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
If these were your friends answers to the sparrow then they are filled with wisdom. This is a very lovely write filled with love and hope. You brought a smile to my face and warmed my heart with this. Welcome to All Poetry and please enjoy your time spent on this great site. Keep up the wonderful work.
Joyce
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