I just want to be in your arms tonight, with our bodies so close together we feel as one,but fate has not ment us to be together, not tonight, not ever. We belong together we fit each other so well but by morning you will have said I do to a man who does not know anything about you, even you don't love him like you love me, you have told me yourself. I would give anything to be that man saying I do, I feel so sad deep inside of my soul. It's almost like I'm loosing you, but I will alway's rememeber the fun we had together that is one thing I will keep forever even if I can't keep you.
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Written May 21st, 2006
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I really liked this. But there are a couple of technical things I noticed.
ment- meant
The part in stars is a little akward~~~
We belong together we fit each other so well but by morning you will *have said I do to a man who does not know anything about you*, even you don't love him like you love me, you have told me yourself.
Overall I really liked this.
keep up the good work -
The past will never be forgotten as it will always be a speciall memory between two people of a love lost but never forgotten. xxxx YES i will be there next yr so get working on those incredible vows for her.
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this is filled with so much emotion and feeling. you made it flow like writing is so effertless. amazing job you are an amazing writer.
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a very heartfelt write full of real heart and soul. Fate brings us to many directions and even tho we never know which way they shall bring a person's heart to a personal and touching past present or future - noone trully knows what fate will ever bring to people. Even if you may feel you have lost the eternal bliss of love's total passion(which I am sure you havent lost all of it)but you have the other persons' eternal friendship i am quite sure!!! Thanx for your very kind friendship. keep up the grand writes. I have added you to my favourites so hope to see more of your very heartfelt writes. xx
Edited on Jun 02, 9:17 p.m. because 'wording xx'. -
Great piece- is this personal? Keep writing, this was a sad and well expressed write of love- more poetic prose than poetry.
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Pozo
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