Within filthy muck
squirming tadpoles grow beneath
red lotus blossoms.
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Author notes
The lotus is the image of buddhist perfection (ie. The Lotus Sutra) for it rises from out of the most dank and putrid of waters to become a stunning graceful flower.
Written May 21st, 2006
In a list
A contest entry
- Haiku Contest (Results being corrected-- This contest is closed. ) by Dreamy Green Eyes.
300 points, ended May 27, 2006, 38 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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However does a person write a haiku? They are all brilliant and I have not tried one because I can't fathom writing anything good in so few words! You did it and others do it and what the heck! I'm gonna try! This haiku is just wonderful.
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It's amazing what kind of beautiful images you can create with a simple haiku. I love it!
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Thank you so much for your insightful read. It pleases me to see that the image resonated with you. Love and respect, barefoot.
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That actually reminds me of camping an how much i hated to feel that kind of mud between my toes with barefeet. This made me giggle an smile. Very well done
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This haiku was beautiful and packed with imagery. You kept up the traditional 5-7-5 syllable count. The piece flowed and the words were not at all forced to meet the syllabic(right word?) count. Thanks for commenting on "George Bush as Satan" and keep up the great work. Also, I wish you the best of luck in the contest!
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dear barefoot,
what a delightful poem you wrote! it is full of life and full of wisdom. on one hand, the scenery of nature can be imagined in detail, and at the same time, a spiritual lesson is told. it is a lesson that filthy muck serves as the base and fertilizer of many life forms. a lotus flower has its roots deep inside the mud, while striving towards the light where its beauty is revealed ...
how enchanting.
marion -
Beautiful work!
Within filthy muck
squirming tadpoles grow beneath
red lotus blossoms.
Very well done! I like the imagery put into this haiku! You leave the reader with the image of the beautiful lotus instead of the image of the filth... nice touch... Thanks for sharing your wonderful talent! Best wishes in the contest! Debi
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this is a fantastic image plucked from nature, and with spiritual implications. a lovely haiku.
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thank you for such a wonderfull critique of the imagery and inner workings of the poem... it made me feel smart.
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excellent
hi barefoot - i love the juxtaposition in this evocative haiku between the dirty mud and the beautiful flower. having the growing tadpoles as the middle image implies growth & continuity.
a lovely haiku, subtle and beautiful and wonderful.
i hope you do very well in the contest with this excellent haiku.
best wishes on your barefoot haiku path,
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Poor tadpoles, but soon they will become beautiful frogs, yes Beautiful.I just love frogs, every one a prince waiting to be kissed, Ros
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