She's lost and alone
Knowing no ones coming home
And she prays for an angel
To take her away
Where the hell is that angel?
When she's begging for help..
Where the hell is that angel?
When she's cutting herself
She's just a pretty girl
With so much hope
And that hope's thrown away
When nothing helps her cope
Is it just a waste of time?
To sit here and whine
Waiting for God to chime in
When she knows-
He doesn't give a shit!
Is there even a thought
That runs through her mind
That he will save her
When she's rundown and confined?
Her mascara is running
From tears she can't hide
She's another outcast
Hanging on one thin line
And she prays for the answers
And she prays for the strength
But where is that angel
That's 'always by her side'
And where is that angel
To whom she can confide?
She's lost and alone
Knowing no ones coming home
And she prays for an angel
-That's not even there..
Author notes
Written May 20th, 2006
A contest entry
- Swirl this Raspberry. by sweetpearl.
300 points, ended June 1, 2006, 8 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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This is an intense poem...raw and honest. It would make an amazing song. I've read three or four of your pieces, and you've got quite some skill in using rhyme to make your piece flow well and give them strength. Keep working on it, and you'll eventually be amazing!
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this is deep. does this hit close to home or are you just that creative. hit me back
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I LOVE YOU BABY
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WOW THAT IS REALLY GOOD!!!!!!!!! that almost made me cry. all i can say is wow i dont know what else to say so im going to go
jenn -
THIS IS A WINNER I WILL COMPLAIN IF SHE GETS ZERO POINTS. i SWEAR. THIS IS SUCH A BETTER, DEEPER WRITE, BY FAR, TAKE IT FROM ME.
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wholey SHITE. where did THIS come from? THIS is top form sara, giving a glimpse of her talent. you make my muse dance baby girl.
i love this. phenomenal. i mean that.
matt -
AWWWW...Babe, I love this write, you did a really good job!!! I am really really sorry about what those dick head people did to your apartment!!! You know Donny will get her done for you when he gets home!! HE is pissed about it!! I love you girl~!! I get to see you on June Tenth!! HEhe...Amys babyshower!! Bye babe, i love you and so does Madison!!! _AMberLeigh_ Buckley!!
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That is magnificant!!! I love you!!!!!!!!
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Wow darling, I hope everything is okay. I miss your poetry, but I enjoyed seeing you happy. I hope you are okay and that this is just a poem, but you know I'm here if you need anything.
The poem is amazing. Really just a great write. Glad to see you writing again.
Cheers,
Leah -
"But where is that angel
That's 'always by her side'
And where is that angel
To whom she can confide?"
--when I was in my early teens I didn't know what to believe in. I thought the possibly of god and angels could exist. Now I've grown up and know my answer ... but back then, I didn't, and this reminded me of that. When I was down I would ask these types of questions. The part quoted is my favourite stanza. I liked the rhyme.
I think choosing the ending to not rhyme was a good idea. It gives it a more hopeless feel.
I'm not sure if you read my poem of the same title or not, but it's angry towards god too. Thanks for entering and good luck in my contest.
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