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The Tiny Red Rose

Among the choking weeds and thorns.
One day a tiny rose was born.
Struggling with all its might.
The tiny red bud saw "its" first sunlight.

There it stood so beautiful so red.
Nestled amid the thorny weed bed.
"The weeds grew taller and taller.
The thorns grew stronger and stronger".

It took all the choking the pricking of the thorns.
Since the very first day the tiny red rose was born.
But the little rose grew stronger each day.
Kept pushing the thorns and weeds away.

The rose had grown and was in full bloom.
Until it realized there were no more room.
The weeds just grew taller and taller.
The thorns just grew stronger and stronger.

Soon the beautiful red rose
I could no longer see.
Something I loved had been taken from me.
The pain in my heart oh how can it be?

Now I just stand and look at the weeds and thorns.
And think back to the day the red rose was born.
I will just keep right on waiting to see.
If my beautiful, Red Rose will come back to me.

   

Author notes

I hope you have a good imagination this is a poem from real life I Hope you like it.
Written May 20th, 2006

wingsofgold25








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  • hend shaheen
    October 15

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    WOW!! this was brilliant....the struggle between rose and weeds good way to represent struggles of life....and a very good rhyme ..thanx for taking time to enter and good luck


  • Calandra Jane
    June 14
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    This is really nice! beautifully written and nice flow. Thanks for entering!!


  • T.o.r.t.u.r.e. gold member
    April 19

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    first. i must say congratulations on all the trophies won with this poem. and this is well deserved thanks for entering and good luck in the contest


  • Denerica
    April 19

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    Bravo!

    Wow, so beautiful, I love the triumph over the weeds anology, only to know one day something could change, It is just a heaven sent poem. Blessings.


  • TheSexyOne
    April 19

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    AWESOME x10000

    IT WAS GREAT, a good flow and such sweet poem,I LOVED IT SINCE THE FIRST LINE it was amazing, thnx for entering


  • Anu-Nataraj
    February 24
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    ohhhhh sooo cuteeee
    this is soooo niceee friend !
    good work and good luck..
    reli loved it !


  • januaryrain gold member
    January 3
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    awww so sad, I hope your love comes back.
    Well done.
    Thank you for your entry.


  • Poetryintheblood gold member
    September 21, 2008
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    Thank you for your heartfelt entry, good luck in my contest, Josie


  • edit my world.
    August 24, 2008
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    gorgeous write
    thanks for entering


  • Whispering-Night
    August 15, 2008
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    i likes it,very pretty,touching!


  • Melissa Burns
    July 21, 2008

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    Thank you for the entry into my ever so humble little contest. I wish you all the best of luck in the contest!!!!!!


  • BehindTheShadow
    July 21, 2008
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    A Splendid Piece

    Enjoyed it immensely!


  • xxRainbowDawnxx
    June 16, 2008

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    awww this is such a cute poem, it's really beautiful and I love roses myself, they are so telling and so expressive.


    • wingsofgold25 silver member
      June 18, 2008
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      Thank you for your nice comment on my Poem Yes The Tiny Rose Represented the Loveone that I Lost.


  • catz Moderators member
    May 10, 2008

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    This is a lovely poem, even in the saddness as it progressed. I especially like the first stanza Congratulations on all of those trophies you've received for it and I wish you good luck in this contest

    Dee

  • Warrior7
    May 8, 2008

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    This is a beautiful piece the imagery was perfect and the poem was so smooth to read.
    Excellent.
    Thanks for entering


  • 2lullabyhaven
    April 23, 2008
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    Very nice, congrats on your trophies. thanks for your entrieslol


  • serenity silvermoon
    March 23, 2008
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    this was so wonderful congrats on all your trophys my favorite part of this poem is the part where it says "Soon the beautiful red rose I could no longer see.
    Something I loved had been taken from me.
    The pain in my heart oh how can it be? thanks for sharing god bless you forever and always love serenity


  • masky
    November 8, 2007

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    Oh, this was wonderful. Just so wonderful, from all the points of view. Roses are my favorite flowers, after all
    You know, as a first, what I could suggest? Using a RED font and a green one for links! So it accords to the roses in the left side of the page(It might be just me, but I LOVE it when colors go well together! ^_^ )
    Okkk, as for the actual poem. It wrenched my heart and made my imagination go wild, in the good sense of the expression. And my heart went "AWWWWWWW" while reading it. There were only two stuff I could suggest correcting:
    "The tiny red bud saw it's first sunlight."
    "It's" is supposed to be "its" and...
    "The weeds just grew taller and taller.
    The thorns just grew stronger and stronger."
    Maybe it would sound better like:
    "The weeds grew taller and taller,
    The thorns, as well, grew stronger."
    It was a deranging effect...and such a beautiful poem shouldn't have anything making it less beautiful.
    All in one, I guess that's all I have to say! Congratulations on writing such a beautiful poem (and for all those trophies, actually, heee!), thank you for entering my contest, and good luck!


  • RedwingSpirit silver member
    November 5, 2007

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    This is an Excellent piece congratulations on the two golds and the bronze trophy i wish you the best of luck in this contest Let's clear things up! by masky. 1000 points, ended November 4, 15 entries


  • jcat gold member
    October 24, 2007
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    this was a really sweet poem. thank you for entering the contest and good luck!

  • wingsofgold25 silver member
    April 27, 2007
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    Sorry OOps

    Sorry I missed reading the 10 lines or less so guess I will be D/Q.
    But hey Hope you will read it anyway.
    Good Luck With Your Contest.
    ARLIE


  • Exit-Stage-Right
    February 9, 2007

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    Interesting!

    I had stopped in to see what sort of poems beat me out in the contest. This one really caught my attention as I had written a piece in a remotely similar vein.

    (http://allpoetry.com/poem/476154)

    Your poem reads very smoothly and was happy to have found it here. Congratulations on its 2nd trophy!


  • Cupcrazy gold member
    February 3, 2007

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    Wonderful

    A wonderful piece with excelelnt rhythm and flow. The rhyme is well done and the emotion is perfect. Great write, good luck in this contest. Bunny


  • Ryno
    January 29, 2007

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    Amazingly heartfelt, perfect flow, great write from beginning to end. Congrats on your pre-recieved award, it was well deserved and thanks for entering my contest.
    ~Ryan~


  • Walking shadow
    December 27, 2006
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    You are invited to super top gun

    Good luck in the contest!

    http://allpoetry.com/contest/2335561

  • Walking shadow
    December 13, 2006

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    WOW!

    This poem was a winner form the moment I read it. Congrats for placing gold. Gold sure looks nice in your trophy case. You get an automatic bid for my super top gun contest, good luck!


  • Walking shadow
    December 13, 2006
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    Congradulations!

    You have been added to the finalist list. Great poem. A pleasure to read.

  • Walking shadow
    December 12, 2006

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    The weeds and thorns

    This one is well done. The choking weeds and thorns stand for lifes challenges. The rose is the hero of this poem. Sometimes the weeds will choke out your dreams. Great job poet.
    Good luck top gun!


  • FAH faithandhope
    September 27, 2006
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    Very Nice

    Great write my friend, just wonderful! Mine is similiar, funny how that is. I really really enjoyed this. Thanks for sharing and good luck. Blessings, FAH


  • CarCrashHumor
    July 6, 2006
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    wow haha, you actually managed to make me think of a rose as a litle baby. very sweet, and cute, but sad.
    i loved this poem! great job arlie ED.
    keep up the good work!
    xx-crash

  • wingsofgold25 silver member
    June 20, 2006
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    Inspiring

    I applaud this short poem. although short it maybe it reached deep into my soul and stirred the memories of the hedge I attempted to build around those I tried to protect.
    Soon the hedge began to erode and crumbled down soon I realized it wasn't a hedge they needed
    . it was just being there when they needed me was the best protection I could give.
    Again I applaud the Wall it was so well structured and right to the point.

    Arlie




  • Farkas1
    June 19, 2006
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    Hi

    I wrote a short poem that touches on the same subject. This is a very nicely rendered poem of the death of innocents, choked by the vulgarities of life, or a true love pure and selfless overcome by the mundane drudgery of life.

    The Wall

    Brick by brick I built this wall
    I don’t remember the first one laid
    For a while it was not very tall
    Today it is a palisade

    I built this wall to keep things out
    But much to my chagrin
    The higher this brick wall got
    The more it keeps me in



    Farkas1


  • xxunloved07xx
    May 22, 2006
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    WOW this was a really really great poem and i loved it lotz you did a excellent job on this and i really enjoyed reading this you have great talent and i enjoy reading your poems keep up the fabulous work and thanks for sharing with all of us here on allpoetry


  • XCaramelxSweetieX69
    May 21, 2006
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    This is a really good poem and I love it lots! I still don't know who this is about lol, but still I love it! I've never seen you write a poem like this before that I can think of, so this is new for me. I'm glad you put this on here, because I can really relate to it, and I'm sure a lot of other people can too. You did a great job on this, and I love all of your poems. Keep on writing, Jessica.

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