my dads a good man
but he is always drunk
never ever sober
last I saw him he really stunk
sittin in his corner
over by the bar
i love my father
but i love him from afar
~~~O~~~
My reply.
Maybe you oughter think to send your Dad
packing on a slow boat to China-one way!
To stink that way he must be awfully bad
they’ll chuck him into the sea every day.
Now, your poem though it’s only short
it has a lot of errors in it, wink wink!
it has a very sobering message here sport
if you drink to excess, YOU WILL STINK!
So Dad, if you stay sitting in the corner
make sure you’re on your Pat Malone mate
Coz you pong! and your kids think you oughter.
Out of ten I won’t be harsh, I give you eight.
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