Unbreak my heart,
Stop the anguish and pain,
Mend these bleeding wounds,
Pray that they don’t stain.
Unbreak my heart,
Seal it with your affection,
Rid it from all disease,
And all infection.
Unbreak my heart,
Undo this evil crime,
Bind it with your love,
One piece at a time.
Unbreak my heart,
Again for my sake,
Fill the remaining cracks,
And never let it break.
Author notes
Write is Inspired by the song "Unbreak my Heart." You should listen to Il Divo's version of the song. It's called Regresa A Mi (unbreak my heart) They're are AMAZING!
Written May 1st, 2006
In a list
A contest entry
- Only rhyme prewrite contest by Ami.
550 points, ended October 1, 36 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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oh I've heard that song before and you did great with it..
Awesome write with good rhyming and a nice flow
Thank you so much for entering and good luck
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woww this is reealy good- i loved the small repitition
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I'm wondering if this would have more effect if you added to it and changed the "pleading" effect to a more "demanding" effect. For when you are truly heartbroken halfway through your begging turns into anger. It was a great write, good luck.
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Nice flow, and its a great theme, the pain and pleading is very well expressed,
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Ohhhh!!!
I really liked it. It was really good. The whole thing was really well written and you could feel the emotion in it. You could feel how badly she wanted him to unbreak her heart instead of leaving it broken. -
for some reason i found it cute. even tho i dont think it was meant to be. good job in penning this
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a good inspirational poem yeah when i saw the title i thought of the song and so clicked in - spill ink and twist me into the crazy shape of love...
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Very good poem. You had a couple of hitches in the flow but overall this was a powerfully written piece. Keep up the great work!
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ilove that song
and i love this poem
im not so good with comments so ill stop before i make myself look stupid..lol
<3
crisis -
cool. i will have to read your stuff more often.
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sounds good to me!
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wow, that was beautiful. very touching and i am going to have find that song and listen to it. that had great flow and rythme. that is one thing that i havent been able to do lately. i will bookmork this and give you an applause later ok?
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I find myself laughing because I was listening to the song while I was reading this. I really like this. You did a great job! Keep up the good work and continue penning!
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Wonderful emotions expressed here. This is fabulous.This is really beautiful poem.
You described your feelings very well! This is an amazing poem.
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Beautiful
This is poem is beautifully written. And such a wonderful song to have been inspired by too. I too enjoy listening to Il Divo. Thank you for sharing this and allowing me to comment on such a beautiful piece of work.
Best Wishes
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This was a very touching poem. I'm speechless...what else can I say? Keep up the good work!
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This is beautiful!!!! I know the song that you say inspired you to write this. It is an awesome song!!!! This is a great write!!!!
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Ok.... sweet, simple, had little flow problems that made it seem less airy than I would have hoped for.
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This is most beutiful. I too am influenced by songs. It can be one word or more that will make the words flow like liquid satin. Thank you for sharing such an emotional piece. May God bless you.
Rose -
Inspiration always leads to something great and this is my proof.
Once again this is another amazing poem i have read tonight and have thought to myself 'i wish i wrote like that'
Well done and congrats!
Keep up the good work.
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