sunday afternoon
the hammock swings lazily
a book drops to ground
Author notes
Written May 20th, 2006
A contest entry
- Haiku Contest (Results being corrected-- This contest is closed. ) by Dreamy Green Eyes.
300 points, ended May 27, 2006, 38 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Thank you for taking the time to read and comment. I really do appreciate the time people give to commenting on my poetry.
I enjoy reading your poetry and I hope you are not offended at any comments I make. -
nice thoughts of summer days
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Thank you nevertheless for taking the time to look at my poetry and comment. I much appreciate it.
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Man, everyone's said what I was gonna say. "short and sweet" "nice summer feeling"
Thank you for taking the time to critique my poem. 
Good luck with the contest!
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Thank you for your kind words and for the time you took to look at this poem.
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this is awesome!!!! so short and so sweet! thts y i love Haikku's! your description was awesome i can really see this happenin! wonderful write i really love it!
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Thank you for your kind comments. I have been learning about Haiku on AP. You are welcome to have a look at my column, if it is any help. I am becoming quite enamoured of them myself.
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Thank you for your comments and for taking the time to make them. Thank you also for your best wishes.
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Thanks Myron. I will and about Frost as well. Thank you for all your help. I greatly appreciate it.
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sunday afternoon
the hammock swings lazily
a book drops to ground
hi amber - you have some wonderful images in this 17 syllable haiku. there is a nice summer feeling or warm spriong day atmosphere in this one.
you have forgotten about the kireji (or haven't you been taught that yet?)and this reads more like a list, rather than the ebb and flow of modern haiku. that's nothing to worry about, because this contest is only asking for images of nature in the 17 syllable format, and you certainly have produced a possible award winning poem judged on those preferences - but if you want to revise this poem after the contest ends, please contact me. -
I've come to love haikus during my stay here at AP - and every one I read makes me love them even more! Your poem is inspiring and makes me want to write my own haiku. Your words captured the peace and laziness...it made me long to feel the same (instead of dealing with exams). A lovely, simple write. Well done!
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Nice work!
sunday afternoon
the hammock swings lazily
a book drops to ground
Great work! I love this haiku! Very calm and enjoyable! Thanks for sharing your wonderful talent! Best wishes in the contest! Debi
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I hope this made you think about stringing a hammock. Thank for all your kind comments.
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wow this is amazing the image this portrays so calm and almost inviting brilliant
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