Beneath a blank, gun-metal sky
We lay asleep, my love and I.
When we awoke, with sugared sigh
My love told me a bitter lie,
Still drugged by sleep.
In restless dreams it was conceived,
And from some dismal shadow thieved;
But in false-favoured beauty sleeved
Became the truth that I believed -
Such tales are cheap -
About a bliss for which I yearn;
I made this truth my lie in turn,
Beguiling me. Too late we learn
Such falsehoods will, as quicklime, burn;
We sow, we reap.
Their flimsy wraps the breezes blow
Aside, to strip their outward show,
And truth's triumphant demons crow!
Now from my veins my life will flow,
While I with soft rejoicing go
Beyond the bourn no mind doth know,
Where fires, not golden lanterns, glow
In caverns deep.
Author notes
This was partly, but only partly, inspired by Coleridge's lines:
Like one that on a lonesome road
Doth walk in fear and dread,
And having once turned round walks on,
And turns no more his head;
Because he knows, a frightful fiend
Doth close behind him tread.
Written May 19th, 2006
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Thank you, thank you
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Quite an excellent write, sister dear! I have a slight and passing knowledge of Coleridge (very slight, mind you) - and I see your partial inspiration here. I do love this sentiment, no matter how it is expressed. Many another's lie has been made my own and many the times I have suffered for that. Well done, well done!
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Sister J, it chilled me to write it too. The jaunty rhythm brings the rictus of a grin to the self-destruction I am expressing. I am glad you liked it.
M
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Hmmm - brilliant as always love, great form and rhythm, but very dark - chills my blood and aches in my heart.
Hugs, J -
{I think he liked it}
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Bravo!
Exceptional, wonderful, classic! I absolutely loved this, loved it, loved it! ("More,"...great!) Bravo!
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Glad you enjoyed it. Thanks for your encouragement.
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excellent presentation
This is very well written. I like the mysterious feel of it. You have captured the readers attention at the start, and pulled them all the way through this mental journey of yours.
I enjoyed this one.
etherealforu
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Thanks, Choirangel - glad you liked it.
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eshhh wow this was very deep and well writen the background just lit up my eyes, thanks for sharing this piece, and keep up the awesome poetry...
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{lends you her iron}
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The road to Hell's paved with bad intentions...so be careful
of where you end up...this just screams with dire predictions
with no saving grace...a warning to us all maybe? you've really
twisted my brain today... with this piece...so excuse me while
I go and iron it back into place...I'm going to tell you how
absolutely brilliant this is... but I think you probably
already know that...and if you didn't well it's been said now..
with a 
lapoe...
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Syr Scribbles - thank you for reading it and commenting.
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Princess, I blush at your comments.
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Very well written. The lies some beleive as truth are so sad, yet man is an insecure beast. Thank you for sharing this.
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Oh my great write.
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Wow - do you think Poetry Planet can take the angst, Melodies?
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Glad you liked it, Rose
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Oh gasp look at this poem
A startling poem to awaken people, so I shall post this on Poetry Planet and the whole Western Hemisphere will go up in flames, such as this poetic background on which you have presented this very fine and WOW poem!
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Very well written, thank you for sharing this with us.
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