Free-flowing blood
Drip drop drip drop
Splattering here and there
I do not know where I am
But really I don't care
Lying here
Crying
So soon to be dying
Just know that for you, I care
That's why I am doing you this favor
For my life is nothing to savor
Yes, it is suicide
But please don't cry
I need to die
No more hurting of my loved ones
No more broken hearts for anyone
So just let me say
This really is the best way
Just know that I love you and always will
But myself I have to kill
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So sad, I loved all of it. It makes me so sad that sometimes people believe they must die to make someone else happy, which I have even felt this at times but get over it quickly relizing how many peolpe you would also hurt, thank you for entering this into my contest, a wonderful write. And good luck to you.
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wonderful poem of strong raw and cutting emotion. good work. the way you put these lnes
"Lying here
Crying
So soon to be dying"
was wonderful it really worked well in the poem. a really good insight to the feelings of a suicidal person
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Wow. A poem through the eyes of the suicidal person. Somehow, you managed to keep to the point and keep it flowing. This poem has much to be desired. Good luck!
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This poem gives the reader a good insight into the mind of someone who has reached the end of his rope and is looking for an escape. Thanks for entering m contest!
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thnx Jinxgirl and i dont always feel this way its just there are time when depression hits u know and it hits hard but the thoughts have become not so much apart of my life anymore.
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I am sorry that you feel this way. If you have these feelings all the time then maybe you need to tell someone, get help from somewhere. It is not a good thing to always be depressed, and killing yourself is never the way to go. You may think no one would care but that is not true, someone's life will be devastated if you do. If you ever need to talk or vent please im me, I will be happy to listen.
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wow, this is a very great piece. Good work. Good luck in the contest and God bless
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