A candle
solitary, silent cradle
Heat shimmers
Hope glimmers
A guide
darkness, turned aside
soft gleams
Hope streams
A light
burning, ever bright.
Roaming waif
Home. Safe.
Author notes
"Lets Host Contests"
Written May 18th, 2006
A contest entry
- The Ode Contest(PLEASE Click Wisely) by Raazi.
400 points, ended May 28, 2006, 8 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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Hmmm.....a bit too short, and vague. I would love it if it could be made a little bit longer.
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WOW you followed the rules and I found this one to be excellent...short verses, rhyme scheme, great flow, and the best thing...exact telling of the greatness of candles
good luck
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This is a very sentimental poem, and yet so gentle. It hits like bricks but it still manages to get the right sense.
It's beautiful. -
keep on thinking...there is no fun if I think for u...because we are the one who are hosting the contest. U have a lot of time. Think, think and u may find a better substitute
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Thank you so much for your kind words Strawberry Moon.
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Thank you The Contest Bank for the comment I tried very hard to change the last stanza, but could make it work for me no other way.
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It is short and simple and I personally feel that has been written with a great ease, yet is expresses a lot! I love the way it has been written. Though, I feel that in the last stanza second line the last word should be 'brighter' than 'bright'
I know that it will effect rhyme but still think about it. Thanks for the wonderful entry.
Best of luck n all the best for this n every contest -
I have candles all over my house your poem has such a gentle aura about it. Calm and enduring. A solitary light burns the brightest. Beautiful
love and light
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Beautiful
Spirit spoke and I listened for I have not been online for several days. My friend The Crapaud knows why and this poem has lessened the sadness in my heart. Home. Safe.
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