Whenst I observe the Sky above
And linger afore it turns to blue
My heart is filled to brim with love
In seeing thus the day born new.
The deepening colours, scarlet and amber
Spread across a canvas bare
And all these tones here seen up high
Make mind reflect on dying embers.
Softly appears, natures art, so fair
Clear white Clouds invade the Sky.
If all things ended, I would not care.
I see this Sky, and do remember
The brilliance of Nature's sigh.
When Sky adapts and fades to gray,
Still evermore I feel this love.
Forever I could gladly stay
And see thus turn to shades undreamed of.
With Sun and Clouds'own gentle kiss
Drifting upon this canvas of blue,
Joined for eternity in their migration.
Thy heart doth overflow with naked bliss,
Thy soul, whilst pondering this view,
Is overwhelmed with celestial elation.
Heaven's gates may not be true,
But if nothing else, you doth know this
Beauty true is Nature's ethereal creation.
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I wrote this fairly quickly, so please be gentle with any criticisms! 
It's based on the form that Keats wrote his odes in; I only wish I was that good!!!
Written May 18th, 2006
A contest entry
- The Ode Contest(PLEASE Click Wisely) by Raazi.
400 points, ended May 28, 2006, 8 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Comments
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I see that you wrote this quickly.....the rhyming is thus, a bit too simple, and at times, even sounds a bit forced. But the content is quite good.
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This is georgeus. I love your rhyme scheme here, I could never be that creative! All in all, this is a great poem and I really did enjoy it.
Good luck in the contest, and in all future contests.
By the way, you might consider publishing... -
It painted my minds empty canvas beautifully...the words brought very vivid images of those things to mind...refreshing and calm For writing it quick you have done a great job, it seems like this took at least a day to dream up excellent good luck to you.
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