You hold my hand
And I experience your life
All the troubles, love, and strife
I feel as if we're one
Somehow sharing experiences
Like we have no differences.
Sometimes I feel
so connected, so together
It seems unreal
Like we are one person
not two
Like everything that I do, you do too
When I feel like this,
I don't notice my heart;
That the beat's race had begun to start
Without knowing,
my body is pumping with emotion
I appear so serene, even though I have this notion.
I look into your eyes,
and everything seems right
I just want to leap, and hug you real tight
All the electricity
running through my heart
I can't stand the distance that we're apart
Even though you're right next to me
My heart is anxious for more
I can't stand still; I need to deplore
Deplore into your arms
With defeat
With you around me, I feel so complete
Like all the emptiness
from my life is gone
because you make my heart grow so strong
I know somehow, that you're my soulmate
A million words can't even describe
How you affect my heart rate
And just incase
I get too carried away to even speak,
I just want you to know, that you make me complete
To: My boyfriend, Cody (Now have been going out for 16 months)
"I love you, sugarcakes! MMMMWAH!!!" :-x
Author notes
Just writing this piece made my heart race. "Whooo!" gatta cool off here. hahaha. Anyways, I love Cody so, so much. Everyone says that they can't describe love. Like you just know, that it's not any certain knowledge of it, or ....describable feeling. But I have a feeling for love, and it's electricity. If you agree, please reply to me. thanks.
~Jessica
aka- mistieyedreamer
Written May 18th, 2006
In a list
A contest entry
- A 'Muse' Me by Felix B. Hellsings.
300 points, ended October 21, 2006, 19 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Love by Blooming Poet.
315 points, ended December 26, 2006, 8 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - What is your defenition of love? by your.guardian.angel.
300 points, ended January 13, 2007, 39 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Just Me...And You... by FlipperSwitch.
600 points, ended September 8, 2007, 18 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Very 'close' feeling about this piece. I think the breaking in the lines could be better arranged in some areas but over-all I really like the sincerity in this.
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lOve can be pretty mazing I know that for a fact. In this poem you described love so well. It is an amazing piece of art in the form of words. Thank You for enetering, my contest
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absoloutely fantastic. I've been trying to put in words myself, and you've really done it! it made my heart do that flippy thing it always does when im with him. Thank you, it was just, words cant describe how much it sort of connected with me.
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I love this,it hits so personally with me, sometimes being in two bodies is as agonizing as being a thousand miles apart, love the emotion you send through your words
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It's funny cause love can be described in so very many ways that it almost makes it indescribale in a sense. Though I must and do agree that love can sure have an electrifying feel to it like nothing else ever before felt. It's is the simplest and yet still the most complex of all emotions one can feel. You have done an awesome job here creating and breathing life into this piece and all that you feel for your boyfriend Cody. I wish you much luck and many more years of loving happiness.
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Awww so sweet, i miss the feeling of electric when your with the one you love. Your very lucky and i hope you two last a life time!
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This is very sweet and loving. This piece a lot of people can feel very conneceted with and thats what makes this piece feel so real to me. great job.
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I know somehow, that you're my soulmate
A million words can't even describe
How you affect my heart rate
And just incase
I get too carried away to even speak,
I just want you to know, that you make me complete
so beautiful and universal expressions here indeed...
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You hold my hand
And I experience your life
All the troubles, love, and strife
I feel as if we're one
Somehow sharing experiences
very nice.. walking along together.. trusting in eachother.. and heloing eachother.. beautiful poem.. full of love, and tendernesss
keep it up
jess -
I can understand completely... my 2 yr anniversary just went past... and I know how it feels Beautiful poem here for your love... I hope he appreciates what a gem he has found for himself
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great imagery plus so much more your right words do paint and the picture movie playing out in my head while i read these words wonderful. Like the format very interesting with the repetition i think enhanced the imagery and made a more powerful statement ..... kept it in the readers mind longer. Glad i dropped by the read enjoyed it keep the ink and words flowing. Very well done
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This is a realy great piece!! I loved how your words flowed together, Poems always sound better when they have that! Great job, keep up the good work!!
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