longing
for her loving
gaze to grace my morning
waiting for her sweet voice to sing
my spirit into a state of gladness
from the shadows i admire her
she knows not of my heart
or my aching
longing
Author notes
it's my first attempt at rictameter. hope its ok. 
Written May 18th, 2006
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This is a beautiful write! Really warmed my heart up this afternoon. I've never seen a romantic Rictameter before, but it really does work!
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That was pretty cool.^_^ I liked it.
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god this is really beautifully constructed and planned out good though it probably took you about an hour maybe two to make it happen but that's still cool
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I haven't read many rictameters but being able to hold up a structure and a strong and poignant poem like that all at once is an achievement in itself. I like the way it begins and ends in 'longing' to me it makes it feel like what you speak of is never-ending and in a cycle. But that's just my interpretation.
Good Write.
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