They said i should have blond hair
i dont think thats true
they said i should have blue eyes
just like you
they said they want me dead
they dont want my kind here
so many things im starting to fear
we all tryed to run
i think most do
are you writing this down
should i slow down for you
the boys in my class
they used to be real nice
now when i see them
i bow my head to cry
im not supposed to look at them
its forbidden you see
if i dare to look
only pain i would see
i used to have a house
it had four rooms
but they took it away
called us dirty jews
my mom was the best
and each and every night
she would come into my room
and kiss me good night
but moms not here now
what they said was not true
they were taking her for a shower
who would have knew
did you know i used to eat
every single night
now we have to fight
fight for our lives
they tell me that they hate me
that my kind should disappear
i wonder if they think that
when they touch my places that are dear
they called me a jew
hated me the most
to think i first thought of it
just as a joke
but now i sit here in this room
and what i tell you is true
you have to understand
THEY CALL ME JEW
Author notes
This is to all my ppl that got hurt!
Written May 17th, 2006
A contest entry
- Help me out by Fade From Memory.
300 points, ended June 25, 2006, 17 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Anything goes by crystallynnbradford.
565 points, ended September 19, 2007, 20 entries
Gold trophy winner
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Congrats on the gold. You really deserved it with this piece. I could tell while reading it how much this issue meant to you... well done love.
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this is very heart wrentching....having a realtive that surivived the consentration camps....this was hard for me to read without bursting into tears...
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I really don't understand why people get offended at Jew or Jap. It's not like it's really meant as an insult. Maybe in the 40's towards Japanese, because of Pearl Harbor. But other than that, I really don't think people should get so offended at that.
As for the poem, I was automatically turned off by the title and the poem had no real depth. It could've been much better and stronger. But that's just me.
Amanda -
I wanted to read a piece of yours after you commented on "Solemn Passage" the other day. I thought I was going to reaad but that didn't happen. Emily Dickinson said that if I finish reading a poem and feel like the top of my head just came off then I know it is poetry. I am searching for the top of my head right now. You blew me away with this. You created a fictional set of events that was true to history and stood your ground all the way from a nice beginning to a tragic close without missing a beat or changing the voice of the speaker. I am impressed. Do you know Mechanical Angel (my AP niece) or Darknessfleeting another of the young ladies that we swap ideas and read each others work? If not check them out. RC
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amazing
very strong
i got quite an impression from it.
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i could imagine reading this somewhere in a compilation book of world tragedies and triumphs, a book of sadness and hope. a book of humanity and our tests and trials and the pains we've caused on ourselves. the beginning was sorta slow and almost child-like. are you writing this from a child's perspective? if so, than i think it does the job. if not, than maybe you want to start defining your language a bit. be more descriptive. you have a great foundation here to build a really earth shaking poem. the end already has that quaking feel. as soon as i get to the last line i realize that this poem was moving me all along. whether you keep it as is or manipulate it, it's a great poem and a great foundation. keep up the great work and never stop exploring language and your emotions.
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Shalom my friend, may they never be forgotten, what happened in the last world war must never be forgotten and mustnever happen again to any race,all the best a good and very sad poem, hugs Di
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wow this poem has alot of emotions in it..........im blonde....and blue eyed though....... it sucks .......
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wow i could feel your pain in this one.simple word but some poems don't need fancy words to get the message across.Good job.
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This is one hell of a powerful poem, very, very emotional and a shocking portrayal. Its something a lot of people would struggle to come to terms with, but I think you approach it in a way which helps the reader to appreciate the nature of what is occurring in the poem. Its really excellent, nice one
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Beautiful=)
oh my gosh!!! this is so sad!!! i know all this genocide took place...but you used all that as and advantage as you wrote this poem...it shows a lot of emotion of what the jew went through as they did bad things to him and his mother...this is a beautiful poem...i hope you keep writing poems like this...keep writing!!! =) -
I like this, it evokes fear and sadness and the hope that no one forgets what people have done to one another so we don't repeat the past.
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are you jewish? well anyway i think this is one is better than any other you've done, im gonna have to applaud this one
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wow this is really interesting! i was abit tentative at the start because its written quiet, well in a way childishly but i mistook that for lack of skill or sympathy for what happened. mhh its hard to describe but anyway i read it and was delighted to be proven so so wrong! i read it a first time and then had to read it again with my music switched off because this poem desurves your full attention! such an origional voice praise praise praise!
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Wow I see your pain in this one, I too come from somewhat of a Jewish background.
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