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Love's Eternal Spring

This is the very first poem I ever wrote. 

It may not win but I am using this opportunity

to honor my husband - we will be celebrating our

30th wedding anniversary in July.

 

 

Your love for me was born in Spring

carried gently on  perfumed wings;

until a sultry breeze I suspect,

sprayed our summer's silky neck;

reds and golds at autumn's peak,

shades of  friendship never weak.


Winter's  colors showed up best,

in light of Parkinsons passed the test;

instead going south for warm weather,

love for me proved  fairer than ever;

you shut out the cold, winter's curse,

wrapping me in for better or worse.


My husband, years in this infernal,

 you have kept our springtime eternal;

a season never changing in your heart,

 seeing me the same as from the start!

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Carly Pop

"This was the very first poem I ever wrote/I know it won't win any contest but I had to enter it for him - my husband - in November of 2004 - I was so overwhelmed by his love for me thru this time being sick with Parkinsons, that when I received the e-mail to enter a poetry contest I knew I had to write a poem honoring him!

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  • Ace - LightWithinMe
    May 12, 2008
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    Hello Carly Pop. This is a very sweet, delicate, tender poem. Good work. Regards.


  • Rebekah-Ann silver member
    May 12, 2008

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    This gave my the chills!!!

    I loved this! Thank you for your lovely entry!

    most of us don't have a cup on the old poem. Here I find two! VERY WELL DONE!!!

    Becks
    XXX


  • brightXdarkness
    July 27, 2007

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    this is a very sweet poem. I like it a lot. For my contest however, it is a must that the number of the option is in the authors info, which it is not.


  • Candy6
    May 28, 2007
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    beautiful


  • Autumns Soul
    April 10, 2007

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    This is beautiful...
    Thank you so much for sharing and entering te contest...
    The absolute best of luck


  • The Lost Boy -PP-
    February 2, 2007
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    Oh, goodness this is devine. So well worded.


  • XxGoldenxXDawnxX
    November 15, 2006
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    Bravo! Absolutely lovely.

  • stevor
    November 15, 2006
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    I like the verve in this write,the rhyme comes out interesting.


  • PrabhuDayal Khattar silver member
    November 15, 2006
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    I am just clapping for this so passionate and loveful melody of the heart here...Indeed so powerful stand to depict the story of the sentiments describing the depth of the love with wo much intensity and beauty as well..I really appreciate this work....

  • Suzanne Dia
    November 15, 2006
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    This is a very sweet sentiment. Its nice to see that there are still people who believe in love like this. I think I'm just too jaded anymore. Very nicely done, though.

    Good luck in the contest.




  • scarlettohara
    November 15, 2006
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    its very very beautiful....too good for a first time writer...u have immense potential..keep on growing!!!


  • DropsOfCrimsonRain
    November 15, 2006
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    the flow, the rythym, the transition from one stanza to next, the poem itself--superb. so beautiful and touching. a worthy poem for your loved one. great job =)


  • Namita
    November 15, 2006
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    superb

    very beautifully written love poem


    Luv,
    NK
    Edited on Nov 15, 5:03 because ''.


  • Carly Pop gold member
    November 15, 2006
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    thank you so much!


  • Chris-10
    November 15, 2006
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    great

    I really enjoyed this write very much so. It is really really wonderful. I can't really think of what to say about it other than I loved it. I can't wait to read more from you! I can't say it enough, I enjoyed it so much! :]

  • LittleD1981
    May 17, 2006
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    Well done for a first poem! You expressed yourself very well. I can tell that since you wrote this, from reading your more current works, that you have learned a lot and have really evolved as a great poet. As for my "critical review": the form is a bit messy, but that's understandable, being this was your first poem. You have 6 lines in the third stanza, 5 in the fourth, and 4 in the first two. Also, your rhyming is not consistent. I imagine this was written quickly, and I don't mean that in a bad way; more in a way as you were really inspired and had to get your thoughts down on paper fast. I could be wrong, though. But, this is still good. A wonderful tribute to your husband. Good luck in the contest!


  • EmotionalLandscapes
    May 17, 2006
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    A lovely tribute to a long standing partner if I ever read one! Congratulations on such a splendid write.

    "Our love floated on summer's warm breeze
    dreaming under the shade of a mulberry tree"

    I really like these lines...it would be nice to do this right now with a loved one. Good luck in the contest. Robi


  • blondone
    May 17, 2006
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    oh this is so good I love the love poems and you've done a excellent job on this one your love shines with the words you write...


  • manoguru
    May 17, 2006
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    surprisingly i found this poem very tasteful... even though it is written in a traditional style and not too heavy with the metaphors (the images and metaphors are flatly conventional )... i think its direct approach has given it a vivacity which would otherwise escape if treated in a circumlocutory manner... such sad and sweet sentiment it tends to arouse... and the length is just enough to bring it to a quite climax... i must give credit to your artistry... keep it up!!!

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