*A*ll I thought I knew
*B*ased on things that were never true
*D*aring to be
*A*ll that I'm not
*G*oing back to where I've never been
*L*ieing to myself
*E*scaping what I am now
*Y*earning to know who I could have been
Author notes
This poem is about wondering who i could have been. My screen name is based on what I would have been named if I wasn't adopted. And I can't help but wonder, would I be happier as AB Dagley?
Written May 16th, 2006
A contest entry
- Username Contest by Alexandra Saint.
300 points, ended May 31, 2006, 16 entries
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The author's comments here add a lot to the poem, kind of like an extra layer. Like Shrek's onions, only different because this isn't an animated film, this is reality.
I like the simple words and wishes you conveyed in your acrostic, because it wouldn't be so meaningful with complex words and such. Yearning is a really strong word, and you used it very well.
I noticed a couple of typos, and it would be good if you could clean those up. Having no spelling errors etc. really makes a poem seem about ten times more professional, I think.
Kudos, and good luck!
Bekca.
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