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A Lilac Adorning Our Window

Like a Norman Rockwell painting, framed within our kitchen window,

a chubby 12-year-old girl donning hazel eyes and curly hair

passes by on her way to school,   scruffy dog  close behind.

An old worn  backpack falls from her slouched shoulders.
“I'll buy you a new one” I whisper as if only she could hear me

reminded of myself at that age and the daughter we dreamed of…

 

Then I shake my head back and forth, not in judgement, but disappointment,
"She never finished her homework",  I say with a sigh

 obvious as the textbook hiding her face and I'm tempted to yell

 "Be careful, and mind the traffic!", oh Carey, you need a mom!


Living three doors down with her grandmother who we hardly see

except for a gnarled hand when it reaches for the rusty mailbox

 hanging by one screw to the weak, weathered frame they call a home .

“Oh Carey, you need a dad!” I'm sure my husband is thinking

This morning Carey holds a bouquet of fresh lilacs picked from the Sullivan’s bush,
like purple splashed across a black and white sketch, they reached out to her I'm sure

over the wobbly fence separating believing they belonged to her.
My mom used to  wrap  lilacs in paper towels, adding aluminum foil

around the stems that kept them from drooping like Carey’s are now
"It would only take me a moment",  I tell my husband,

"to wrap her lilacs the way my mom always did."
“Carey does have a grandmother”, he gently reminds me.
“She needs a mom and a dad!” I cry, threatened with tears

Then suddenly, a cloud bursts  over Carey’s head, rain begins to pour down,
I instinctively grab an umbrella for her and a
s I run out the door

I can hear through my husband’s sad but understanding laugh,
“I think it's us who need Carey!”


Author notes

"Written with a smile knowing now our lives sometimes take on different courses and we must believe God knows what He is doing!! His ways are perfect when we see them not through our own finite understanding but trusting the infinite Creator of this grand Universe!!!" I always wanted 10 kids never had one but we built an orphanage in India never knowing it would house 10 little boys (my ten!)
Written May 16th, 2006

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  • CountryCousin
    March 31, 2008

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    Beautiful Carly.

    My minister and his wife are planning on adopting a child maybe three from another country. I think this piece is wonderful and would give them hope.


  • Little Blue Bird
    March 31, 2008
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    Bittersweet

    This was sad but sweet. I enjoyed reading it. Thank you for sharing.


  • Randomly Beautiful
    March 29, 2008
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    This is simply beautiful. The lilacs reminded me of my own mother and childhood. Your imagery was great. The emotion was there. It could use a bit of tightening but overall I truly enjoyed this peek into your life. Thank you for sharing your muse.


  • xox-emma-xox
    March 29, 2008

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    I love this poem. Sometimes it is not the child who needs the adult but the adult who needs the child. Very well written! I would change nothing about it.
    Check out my poetry! My name is I-Love-Donegal


  • Dlvvanzor
    June 13, 2007
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    Oh I'm so sorry! You do not have the option number in your authors notes, so I have to remove your poem. If you could add it and then re-submit your poem I would be delighted to continue judging it!

  • Dlvvanzor
    June 13, 2007

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    This is really really good! Made me think. I love how realistic it all is, and the image of lilacs is soft and sweet, I could practically smell them.

    Thank you for entering my contest,
    -Dlvvanzor


  • Blushfulmoon silver member
    June 11, 2007

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    excellent~

    This took me back as I read about the lilac's wrapped in paper and tin foil....I did that as a little girl my mom taught me bless her heart.....I read this so much emotion probably because I am meeting the lawyer to asses the property my mom owned in her deed....she passed away 2 yrs ago and her will is still in probate...don't understand all this delay....but your poem took me back to yesterdays....One of my first views of yours...so nice to meet you and I do hope you come visit me as well...
    Heart-touch and a misty eyed tear jerker...
    Best of luck in the contest....but from my POV this is already a winner in my book and again nice to meet you...
    Hugs
    Susan~~~~

  • Virginia Logsdon
    April 30, 2007

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    Wonderful statement

    This evokes beautiful imagry and states a great truth-that we all need each other!Whenever we do a good thing for another, it fulfills a great need in us, as well as in the receiver-a need for love.We all need to be loved!


  • serenity silvermoon
    April 29, 2007

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    i think this was the best poem ive read all day or in my life is this a real story did you two adopt that girl did she take the umbrella in the rain did she ever get her home work done what happend to her mom and dad did they die did they abandon her this was a great poem i was glad to read these wounderful poem i hope to read more of them i hope that if we are not friends we can be thank you for sharing remember let god bless you and keep you and love you forever and always sign dianna lee green also knowned as serenity lynn silvermoon or angel serenity


  • Freed by Mercy silver member
    April 29, 2007

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    What a wonderful piece of life you have woven here, full of vivid detail that drew me in. I understand Carey's life, and your love and concern for her becomes mine. I long so badly for the happy ending, when Carey miraculously becomes your child. Superb write. I don't understand why you haven't won trophies galore for this.
    One little picky thing: "This morning Carey holds a bouquet of fresh lilac
    s picked from the Sullivan’s bush,"
    The s of lilacs is on the next line - a typo.

    I throw roses at your feet, dear poet:


  • xxRainbowDawnxx
    December 25, 2006

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    How strange and unique. We all need our comforts and sometimes our elders need us more than we need them. Sometimes it's just to have the comfort and to see that glimpse of childhood that they miss.


  • W B Burkholder
    December 3, 2006

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    THis was so heart touching and inspiring. and at times, even though this may sound horrible, I wonder If God allows us to suffer in order for each of to show and practicve compassion, is it another test that lays before us, to see if we will do the right thing? NOt sure, but compassion, caring, love for one another, empathy. are all human traits that we should practice more and more. wonderful write, thank you


  • Rose Angel gold member
    December 3, 2006
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    Lovely, Wonderful!

    This is a write,like I rarely see, where the observer,the poet is so drawn in to this little girl...I see girls of my childhood that would be in this category...Some needing extra tlc...I love it!The way it is written is absolutely beautiful!


  • Loveandblessings2u gold member
    December 3, 2006

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    a very good write you have here
    i enjoyed it very much.
    you sure did an excellent job...

    joyce


  • bottleddreamz
    December 2, 2006

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    {{Tear Jerker}}

    Up to the very last line, I was filled with emotions of hopelessness. Then, at the last line the poem takes a slightly humorous twist.

    Your words show passion, and the mother's worried touch. (regardless if you have kids or not) I'm simply at a loss of words to describe how wonderfully you portrayed every little detail. From the rusty mailbox to the lilacs wrapped in foil and back to the old grandmother. Wonderfully done, goodluck in the contest. Though I don't think you need it.

    Keep dreaming in ink,
    Jessica


  • Darkkitty
    December 2, 2006

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    Aww...

    That is such a sweet poem, it just makes you wonder how many children are out there like Carey and couples who want children. It just makes you want to tell her
    "Embrace Carey and don't let go."
    Most kids now don't have a mom, dad, or both in there lifes and then there are some that just don't care.
    Good write..


  • LucklesSnake
    December 2, 2006
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    This is such a sweet poem! A really good idea that you wrote perfectly. Kudos!


  • debilynn gold member
    November 10, 2006
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    excellent write

    this is so heart-touching. a beautiful story that ends with the reader wanting to know more like what happened next? to the girl? the grandmother? you and your husband?


  • Master Anarchy
    November 10, 2006
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    Don't cry, for me argent.

    Fantastic, poignant and beutiful.
    Thank you.

    "Whom we never see..." : while 'who' is not considered incorrect, 'whom' is certainly correct, being of the indirect subject. More, poetically speaking, the flow of consonants in this piece is better served, IMO, by the latter's use.


  • WolfHeart
    November 10, 2006
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    would be super with more work

    Oh, sweet poem. Such love and compassion you have. This really warms the heart. How blessed is this young one to know you.
    An excellent poem that touches deep countries of the heart!

    hugs Wolfie

  • Eusebius
    November 10, 2006
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    Bravo!

    this poem is cunningly attractive...though, perhaps, more like prose...it is sweet in an unaccustomed way...wonderful...excellent...the poet truely seduces...lovely...beautiful...bravo! Bravo!!

  • Thedragonisgone
    October 29, 2006
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    I just love the story line, sweetie, you're in the top 10.

  • Thedragonisgone
    October 27, 2006
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    This is absolutely lovely, my dear. I mean truly. I've had the privilege of reading so many in this contest and this just struck my heart. I'm very definitely going to have to read more of you work. Thank you so much for entering. I am honored to read such love, devotion, and compassion.


  • Live with a passion
    September 9, 2006
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    Thats ok, just I had an interesting reply from one of my other critiques and I was afraid I had upset someone. It is fine though.


  • Carly Pop gold member
    September 9, 2006
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    i'm sorry I didn't mean to sound pushy!

  • Live with a passion
    September 9, 2006
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    I absolutely don't understand, you're right, I'm also only 14, I was just saying it didn't really fit my contest, It is a wonderful Passionate poem though. I am so sorry, and hope things work out for you in the best way they can.

    Live with a Pash


  • Carly Pop gold member
    September 9, 2006
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    if you never were able to have kids, then you don't know what that passion can be like!!!

  • Live with a passion
    September 9, 2006
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    This was a very good poem, just it didn't really fit my Idea for the contest at all. Sorry, it's a very heartfelt poem though. Thank you for entering.

  • hiddenbeauty51011
    September 4, 2006
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    i really like this poem it was very well writen

    p.s i am related to norman rockwell


  • Nancygal
    May 17, 2006
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    a very sweet poem, with a lovely story to it. I wonder whether this was based on someone you know? Either way, its a lovely read.


  • H4rd Kisses
    May 17, 2006
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    Nice!

    This is a very sweet write. It sounds like a wonderful beginning to a very enchanting story. You write beautifully with great description.

    She walks by on her way to school;
    Like a Norman Rockwell painting,
    Framed within our kitchen window.

    This is my favorite line. You describe it so well, with such imagery it is great. I would love to read more about this couple and poor little cary. You definately catch the readers attention with this write. Maybe you should make a series? I know I would read it ---Stacey

  • Home Of Pumpkin
    May 17, 2006
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    THIS IS FANTASTIC! such a wonderful and origional idea it is beautifly written and wow how ever did you get the idea, i feel like the charactures are truly real people and you conjour such a strong image of this girl carley that i can really imagine her in my mind, though the couple watching her are shrowded in mystery, i feel you have created a whole new world *excuse the aladin there* with this poem very very welldone!


  • XxMorbidTearsxX
    May 16, 2006
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    it made me think.....

    I really liked this poem. it touched me and made me think.
    thank you for giving me the chance to read and adore it. great job!
    xxMORBIDxxTEARSxx

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