Saturated with deceit
Sickly to the taste
Slips down your throat
Crawls under your skin
And rots in barren waste
Moulds into a part of you
Outlines who you are
Yet twists your words
Binds your strength
Until you’re torn apart
Possession by the deadly
Passion from the cruel
Love is empty useless now
But hatreds used as fuel
Clogged veins full of anger
Denial devourers your pain
Echos that you’re normal
Yet your demons still aren’t slain
The truth will fight through the mazes
That you have built yourself
However hard you try
You can’t block it out
And when it finally reaches you
Your mercy is ignored
Expressionless it consumes you
Eventually you’re cored
Possession by the deadly
Passion from the cruel
Love is empty useless now
But hatred’s used as fuel
Lifeless sketches of your heart
Framed upon the wall
Motionless in weightless dark
Frozen by it all
Twitching in revealing light
Was so blank and aware
That it’s me that wrecked my life
Me that didn’t care
But everyone can see that
Faces clayed with fake sympathy
If I had stayed in the dark
Lies would have become real to me
And I would never
have been so badly burnt
Disfigured, spoiled and stained
I could have lived on hatred
But now I’ll fade away
Author notes
i wrote this in a maths lesson when i was pissed off with everything.. i got kicked out of the lesson for writing it so i finished it in 'time out' even more pissed off than before..i was having a bit of a bad day!
Written May 16th, 2006
In a list
A contest entry
- Give Me DARKNESS! by On Frail Wings..
340 points, ended May 23, 2007, 14 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Life Sucks (rounds contest) by SoftlyScreaming.
600 points, ended July 12, 2007, 17 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - My hands are cold. Show me your veins, I'll show you mine. by Naridill.
1060 points, ended July 8, 2007, 17 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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you need to give me you sn in you AN in order to cycle to the next round
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wow... just wow... not really what i was looking for, but this side of writing, you still followed all of what i asked but just with a different flavor... i liked it, keep it up
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Twitching in revealing light
Was so blank and aware
That it’s me that wrecked my life
Me that didn’t care
That's my favourite part
It's very heartfelt, and I don't understand why someone would kick you out for writing it..
oh wait .. math class ...
lol, my math teacher is also a ruthless bastard
So I write even more in her class
Then shove my good grades in her face
Teach the class .. and piss her off
Nice poem though
I was thinking, you don't have to but,
if you ended it with the same stanza that you were repeating
That might have some effect
Though it won silver as it is
COngrats
NeveR ♥ -
wow
this is really good i like it a LOT good luck!!
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this is a very interesting piece. terrific use of vocabulary and the rhyming was not forced. I wish best of luck in my contest!
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Very impressive piece you have penned here. Your anger burst forth from your words. It reminds me a bit of the waves in the ocean-they can build and once they crest, they subside and calm down and then another one will come along.
I join the others in welcoming you to the site.
vj
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This is an awesome poem. I love the way you let your feelings flow. I know I am not a greeter but Welcome to Allpoetry and I hope you enjoy your time spent here. Keep up the awesome poetry!!!
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