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~ Ripples ~


 

Aimlessly I wondered to my secret peaceful place,
hoping to find serenity for my trembling soul.
A solitary confinement for me to seek grace,
lies just beyond the trees - over the knoll.

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I have been there a million times before,
lies just beyond the trees - over the knoll.
Heaven offers beauty that I can not ignore.
I smile, though stress has taken its toll.

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Removing my shoes, the grass tickles my toes.
A solitary confinement for me to seek grace,
I venture into the hidden place nobody knows.
The wind blows smoothly over an exhausted face.

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I stumble towards the call of the stream,
hoping to find serenity for my trembling soul.
Clouds dance the free sway of a dream,
here in the mist of a heavenly hole.

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Though it seems forever and a long day
aimlessly I wondered to my secret peaceful place,
to let my wrecked mind twirl and play.
I lay back- the stream ripples- fears replaced.


 

 

Author notes

For La-challenge  
A Sonaline
repeating lines:
6=4
10=3
14=2
18=1
eight words per line
Written May 15th, 2006

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  • luckynsincere
    August 27, 2006
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    Thanks so very much for your words here... they are greatly appreciated!!

    Mel

  • luckynsincere
    August 27, 2006
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    Thanks so much for your comment! I truly appreciate it!!
    Melanie


  • luckynsincere
    August 27, 2006
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    Sonja,
    Thanks so very much for your comment. I can barely do your incredible form justice I truly appreciate your words!!
    Melanie


  • morningstar1948 gold member
    August 23, 2006
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    beautiful and well Written

    The beauty in this poetry is enlighting to read. THe flow of word you chose made it flow simple and intelligent & wise. Good luck


  • misticmoonlite gold member
    August 23, 2006
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    vey pretty and enjoyment to read, thank you for this beauty to read, good luck in the contest..MM


  • Sonja
    August 23, 2006
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    I am surprised to see my poetic form used here and you have done it great Melanie. Very nice verses and used picture. Bravo.
    ~Sonja~

  • luckynsincere
    May 18, 2006
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    Thank you very much
    Melanie

  • JaysonBaby
    May 18, 2006
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    good. Like the picture. Keep writing


  • luckynsincere
    May 15, 2006
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    Thank you very much Laura. I am so glad I was able to pull this challenge off Do you honestly think it is a good one for a first??
    I must tell you that all of these challenges are very inspirational to me Thanks so much for that
    Mel


  • Laura Lamarca gold member
    May 15, 2006
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    This is beautiful Another successful challenge! You're good at these Well done with this, there's some lovely images in here. Thanks for sharing. Always and much. La x

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