In surrender, subtle desires,
cheek to cheek-
pressed against soft
terrain, ice-gloss
ruby red.
Felt warm, wetness of
heavy breaths, coaching
onward expressions to
compassionate love.
Pretentiously, swirls lustful,
journey unashamed thirst
of heartfelt preserve.
Tempos rising, heated,
rivers quenching, thoughts
flowing...
Tasting paradise,
releasing-
unspoken words liquid
in surrender, melted hearts
sealed blissful, with
this kiss.
Touching essence
of captured dreams.
Fingers roam your naked glory.
Adorned her- not only eyes
of unclothed passion,
given also,
shivering love-- most sacred.
With abeyance- respire
granted entrance,
temple to...
my earthen Goddess.
Laid to her feet,
blossomed-
heart full,
soul nurtured.
Unattached, all things
exterior-
Giving completely,
my 'all' my love.
Writings of Malabu©2006
Author notes
Inspirations from two quotes presented
Is not a kiss the very autograph of love? ~Henry Finck
You give but little when you give of your possessions. it is when you give of yourself that you truly give. -- Kahil Gibran
Written May 15th, 2006
A contest entry
- In love or lust? by Myjoy.
450 points, ended April 3, 2007, 16 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - but not just any kiss... by JinSays.
1532 points, ended September 21, 36 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
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wow, this was lovely. the color of red you used, the immediate changes in emotion mimic the fly off emotions that happen when a moment like this is at hand. very very pretty, and sexy hot. thank you love.
jin -
A kiss that lingers, tender yet so lovinly discribed her. Second part, giving oneself completely...utterly amazing how these two pieces you have created fromthe quotes so well together. Outstanding penned poem. ~Sie
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Bravo
This is a wonderfuly done piece of work. I like how it's deep and emotional flowing with love yet the lust found within the pleasure of the body. What a great write. Well done.
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Let me start by saying.. whew. Now that was a nicely penned poem. I loved your wording. It hits home with the reader.
Tasting paradise,
releasing
unspoken words liquid
in surrender melted hearts
sealed blissful
with this kiss.
That was my favorite stanza... it is perfection! Thank you so very much for your wonderful entry, and I wish you the very best of luck in the contest
Always,
Melanie
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Hi Truly.....yes I agree with you on mention of love twice....but this writing is two writings in one......the first half is thoughts on a kiss.......based on the first quote......
the second portion is based on giving complete love of yourself based on the second quotation as contest require......
My comment box shows quotes inspired by this writing.....
Thanks bunches for your honest critique........it is appreciated......there may be times when I change things suggested.......though this be a time I cannot.....
Peace
Mal -
another fairly nice one I shall applaud this even though its not as good as the first one I read. I didn't like how you mentioned love twice in the poem. It's obvious that it is a love poem so I don't see the reason of making it so obvious I would have liked to see some creation. Maybe even gonig as far as saying "infatuation" the first time and then ending with love. In my opinion it would have made it seem like you were slowly falling in love with this being, which is how true love works. ~James
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this is so awesome, truly beautiful. sexy and hot, yet written with pure class. i just loved this poem. you have really done a great job on this write. your poem is romantic from beginning to end. a very well written write.
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very sensual, this is so romantic, and passionate! a true display of love between two people. great write, and thanks so much for sharing this, i really enjoyed this very much. the background is also nice!!!
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Nice one
a nice write.Rhyming is a bit perturbed but that does with the flow of poem.The two quotes you quoted are really great.i like the lines Adorned to her, not only eyes
of unclothe passion
given also,
shivering love sacred.
so keep penning ahead.glad to stop here.
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Majestic
Sensual and very tasteful. Extremely well written with beautiful imagery and a lovely flow that seemed to pulse very subtly with a glorios life of its own. -
i really like this it could very well be the best poem i have read all day....wait! it is! oh joyful funsticks! what a day thankyou so much! have love and happiness for the next 1000 years!
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a beautifuly painted sensuous poem in the midst of love.a few words to capture a whole lot of admirers. passion is creation. well penned.
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Amazing!!This is deep sensual thoughts protray in a wonderful write.You have done a splendid expressions of your emotions.
thanks for the read of a great poem Tasting paradise releasing
unspoken words liquid
in surrender melted hearts
sealed blissful
with this kiss.
keep up the good work 
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unattached are things
exterior,
giving
complete love.
A great immagery and flow here inded..
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AWESOME! So very unique and beautifully written. You have a great imagination. I really enjoyed reading this! Best of luck in the contest.
fofofo -
unattached are things
exterior to giving
complete
love.
i really like this set of lines from you. i like the entire write really. good luck to you in this contest that we both have entered. hope2makeit -
Mercy, Mal! I would be inclined to say "hot", but that is not nearly subtle enough to speak of your poem. It would, in fact, be a crude insult to your sensitivity. This is simply graceful passion in verse. When I was younger and unattached, I would have given my right arm to know a young man who would speak as you have here. I frequently enter the same contests as you, but I would not dream to compete with this. Would that I could vote for your winning the Gold with this one - that I could vote more than once, in fact! How will I wish you all that I really feel you deserve in the way of good luck in this contest? You will just have to imagine what I mean because you know me so very well. Best - Toni
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excellent
Just one awesome poem you have crafted here. The imagery your words portary one beautiful emotion with which we all desire. My first thoughts a sensual poem but with such class.....this is one that stays in the readers mind just beautiful put together. Good luck in the contest.
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Hi, very sensual, excuse me I'll have a cold shower before doing the rest of critique,........ I'm back dripping all over the computer,lol, very lovely and very passonate, loved it, without a hint of vulgarity you wrote a torrid love poem, it has everything in it, from passion to gentle worship of the one you love, all the best in the comp, I have a feeling I'm in this one too,lol, you have my applause, hugs Di
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Very beautiful and so moving. Well penned. Great job. This is just wonderful....Tasting paradise releasing
unspoken words liquid
in surrender melted hearts
sealed blissful
with this kiss.
That is so sensual. Thank you for sharing. I wish you the best of luck in the contest. Jeannie D
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This is amazing...Idk what to say Im speechless...excellent write...vivid imagery...keep up the great work
~Ashley -
WONDERFUL POEM
Oh my Malabu you have truly captures the essence of am amazing love. Gee you make me melt.
. This was so beautiful. Your imagery paints a love so sweet. I love these lines.
Adorned to her not only eyes
of unclothe passion
Given also shivering
love sacred
I love your author's quote too. I love Kahil Gibran.One of my favorites
In the sweetness of friendship let there be laughter, and sharing of pleasures. For in the dew of little things the heart finds its morning and is refreshed. Kahlil Gibran
Thank you for sharing this awesome poem. Take care. Jersey Girl, aka, Sandy of the beach.
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Wow Daddy this is just beautiful, as all your writes are Love you always Your Daughter Josephine
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