‘If’, like I said in the title,
‘ you could’, and I’ll emphasize ‘could’
because I know there will be no argument that you can’t;
‘If you could hold that pose’…
and here I beg, I must describe what ‘that pose’ is-
for it is a critical aspect of this piece,
(a piece that I will try to turn into a quality poem in a minute!):
the ‘pose’ is your most beautiful photograph,
the one you might post on an Internet site,
one that will stir the hearts and passion of those of the opposite sex
and make you the most beautiful person in the world…
If you could hold that pose forever’,
and here ‘forever’ refers to the fixed nature of the pose in the photograph,
a pose that, for all practical purposes, is ‘captured forever’, so...
‘If you could hold that pose forever,
then falling in love with your photograph would make sense.’
(yes, I’ll work on that, as it is not very poetic!)
‘If you could hold that pose forever,
then falling in love with your photograph would make sense.
Am I guilty of that?’
Yes, I said ‘guilty’,
because I know very well you cannot hold that pose forever.
You do not get up in the morning
to brush your dog-breath away in that pose.
I would not expect you to be in that mood every minute of the day.
I know that is not the complete you,
and I would be quite shallow to think of you only by that one stunning pose,
or, for that matter, to shun you
because of your 214 bad photos
you have hidden in the shoebox
in the back of your closet.
yes, I’ve seen them…
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OK, now to poeticize all this:
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If you could hold that pose forever,
if your eyes were cast eternally
in the one moment captured here,
then love you would have forever more.
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If that pose is your greatest,
then only disappointment reigns
if in life you meet a soul of shallowness.
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For in their heart they’ll love that pose
yet you will change, you will grow
beyond that perfect, static image
eventually fading and being replaced
by the perfect image of another soul.
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So they'll wander, chasing poses
leaving you with wilted roses.
Is that what you sense from me?
Author notes
concerning the shallowness of falling in love with someone's great photo...
Written May 14th, 2006
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The poem is great how ever the circumstance for it happens all to often these day as people dont really represent themselves truthfully and that is so sad. Great job though, you have a wonderful talent and Im so glad you have shared it with us all
Suzanne -
Now ..that was an interesting process, I loved the posting of your thoughts, before the poem, which did not disappoint!
Well done, very creative, and unique.
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Great writing. felt involved in an internal conversation while in a conversation with the one in the photograph.
Found the mix of styles to work forthemselves,
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hmmm.... good one. I didn't really like all the frontage and honestly wouldn't have persevered through it initially had I not clicked on this poem but the wrap-up was worth it. I guess there's this new thing called "face blindness" that is happening to people and being recognized as such after 10 years of internet use and I swear it must be true. It's like the old portraits that were once sold generically to soldiers just so they'd have a representation of someone dear to carry into battle.
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i really loved this poem. It shows feeling and talent. yo're a talented writer. Hope to read more from yo thanks for sharing
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thanks, Cain, funny how I look for the constructive comments first... I knew the final 'poem' in the end needed work, and though others may have tolerated it, here I was spurred to continue with it...
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before the poeticized version, all else was very creative.
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and they say a pictures worth a thousand words...LOL... yes..you can'treally get a sense of the real person in a picture... i liked this poem greatly...keep up the good work... shzoosy
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oh thanks, Toots, I'm blushing!
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This is wholly unfair of you to write a poem that gives me GOOSEBUMPS (please laugh here)! Oh, but seriously - I do have goosebumps. I can't say that has ever happened to me while reading on this site. Heck, it hardly happens to me when I am reading my own work, and you know how proud I am of that! Your preamble is so important to this poem, and of course, you know that - but I have to say it again. I find nothing in here that is "un-poetic" as you say, but I suspect you know that as well. WONDERFUL, EXCELLENT, STUPENDOUS, MARVELOUS, outta adjectives, need to look up more! I have to go now - reading it again...Toni
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truly a beautiful piece. i like how you were talking throughout the first part, and then put it into a striking poem at the end. very well written. great idea and an interesting point that you bring up. thank you for sharing this.
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thought provoking
you bring up a good point and i love you style. you sound liie you thinking outloud and i find it very intreguing. love is so much more than looking good and i like how you hook people by including the thought process. very nice.
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I like how you let us be a part of your figuring it out... This was a unique and interesting read...Thank you for sharing it on here...Trina...
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Interesting insight into your creative process. Different and
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Damn!
damn damn damn!
this was..just..damn!!!
your amazing, Never quit writing!i can't wait to read more!
well done,
loved it
~Lea
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this is almost funny except that so many do this. i think that loving someone for their looks is stupid anyway. getting to know that person is what it is all about. i tend to write a lot of love stuff and my family thinks i have lost it but what they do not realize is that i am merely writing and only one man is who i am writing for. if i write about someone i have only seen a picture of it is in some ways easier as i do not have the problems of getting angry with them and i can make a life for them that may or not be reality. now, talking to that person makes it a bit different for me but i try not to go there with that either. thank you for sharing this as it is something that even i tend to forget at times. hope2makeit
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