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I love you.....

I love you....

I love you like an outraged fire,
My heart full of burning desire.

I love you more than any in the past,
Your love fills me and will forever last.

I love you this is forever  known,
More than any one has ever shown.

I love you likea red-hot flame,
A sensational feeling I cannot explain.

Author notes

this is a poem i wrote about a loved one.
Written May 14th, 2006

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  • lonewolvernsoul
    June 19, 2006
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    Well I liked it.

    Wow a loved one? Could it be me? ^.^ maybe it's a dream. Well if it is dont wake up later love.

    ~Angie~


  • holliebrown
    May 15, 2006
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    B-E-A-utiful!!!!!!!!!!!!

    This sux!!!!! lmao! Just kidding! It was really good! You wont tel me who it is for you pain in the butt!!!! lol But I guess it was ok, no it was GREAT!!!!!!! Go Bamber!!! lol I like reading your poems! I am glad you joined this!!!! Love ya lots!!!!!!
    Imma miss you!
    Hollie Crisel

  • BamberTaylor
    May 14, 2006
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    thnx that means a lot ya it is predictable but i couldnt really think at the time what rhymed with it but thnx again
    Edited on Jun 12, 10:09 p.m. because 'mispelled word'.


  • sweetpearl
    May 14, 2006
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    It's sweet. I normally don't like these short lovey-dovey type poems because I think they're too Hallmark. They don't seem real because there's nothing personal about it ... but this was nicely written. It's all personal preference when it comes to subject. However, I wanted to tell you that I did read it and it is nicely written. The rhyme worked ... I'm not too sure about "fire" and "desire" ... it's just too predictable. But leave it the way it is because it's fine. Elaboration on these types of poems wouldn't work.