I woke from a dream near a clear running stream
In the water a message I heard
In a beautiful song that didn't last long
I still can remember each word
The message did say, that from this very day
And many that went in the past
As many to come but only for some
A virtuous charm shall be cast
With the wisdom of years and see truth in what appears
I travelled a seldom used trail
For honor I'd fight with all of my might
My spirit would not let me fail
The oppressed were set free and the blind could now see
From the wisdom that I had to share
The evil hide or shrivel inside
From the power I held in my stare
Soon all through the land, they could all understand
That message that came from the stream
As I rang the bell,I had broken the spell
That kept everyone in a dream
Author notes
Written May 14th, 2006
A contest entry
- This is a Dream Contest by Sadistic Lavender.
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Thank you for the intrestign entery, it was very good!
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This is very much like a Grimm Faery Tale. The rythm was sporadic, but the beauty of poetry is the rythm can go any which way you like it. I quite enjoyed it. Thank you for entering my contest, and good luck!
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Thank you, Eris. I appreciate your comment. The meter is irratic, but it was written to music.
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I agree with e.c., this poem doesn't follow a certain meter but it's wonderfully written. Thank you for entering and good luck!
Eris
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Interesting poem. You might want to change this:
The message did say, that from this very day
to
The message said that from this very day
The meter is ragged anyway, so the change won't affect anything. The poem itself is intriguing however. I am not a stickler for meter if the poem works for me. This works for me.
Good job.
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