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Poetic Pleas~

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Poetic Pleas~

Gathering pieces on paths I've traveled
A road I have walked upon without fear
Now as I sit back, my weavings unravel
Opening my heart, wondering what's left there

I've known all along, I've desired for true love
But who would grant, a wishful dream to my heart
Even heaven has ignored pleas above
But whose soul would heal, my own tearing apart

I've been taught, and have learned how to suffer
Not sure this rock, further I care to stand on
For even the sinking quicksand some offer
Is appealing sometimes, though I know it's wrong

Oh Lord, please let me breathe, a breath of fresh air
My lungs black, from inhaling lies told to me
Come restore my faith, I've lost with each sad tear
Straight into the known lands of milk and honey

-poeticweaver

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Thanks for reading me, much love and tenderness, Timothy
Written May 13th, 2006

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  • Viyanna Rosemarie 2
    May 3, 2007

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    oh my. i am already in tears for a letter i received and now this. wow! just what i needed. viyanna rosemarie


  • Slyder
    June 4, 2006
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    It seems its our nature to want companionship on the roads we travel, and too often Fate's smug indifference that denies us. A heart-baring piece that chokes me up even as I read it again. I like the form & graphics, your phrasing is beyond comment. A very well written piece, it speaks sadness and longing with an almost Shakespearian air. Hit me up for a background tile I have that might compliment the poem & pic. Write on, poetic bro.
    Slyder


  • brokenpoet
    May 15, 2006
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    This is a sad, clear, and great write. Your diction is impressing and the picture is not only sadly beautiful but is pertinent to your poem.

    A splendid job.


    Melissa


  • Stardust-luvr
    May 15, 2006
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    My dear friend your write brings tears to my eyes as I send my loving thoughts and prayers your way . Many blessings always!! xooxoxoxoxo much love always


  • Wandika gold member
    May 14, 2006
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    The picture and its shape added to your poem. Your poem would have stood out without the picture. It is one of your best. Your pleadings and prayers are heard Timothy. Like you, I wonder sometimes if I will live long enough to get the answer I want to hear or if the answer already came and was no.
    Reguardless, we go on the best we can and do what we can to continue along down life's path.

    Your friend,
    Jim


  • grannyeri gold member
    May 14, 2006
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    This is such a hearfelt write, says so much about how you feel and what you hope and wish for. Great presentation with the black background and the tear picture. Well done.


  • Heavenly Angel silver member
    May 14, 2006
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    Sweet brother mine, please know that if in this life I may help you in any way, it would be my sheer pleasure! You have such a caring and giving heart and a beautiful soul and this just touches me to the core. I love you dearly!
    Always,
    Sandy

  • snifferpup
    May 14, 2006
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    This is really well written and nice. It seems that there was great sadness and pain in this poem. I won't pry, but I do hope that your prayers will be answered so that you may start to continue your life. Good luck to you. Pup


  • prettyangeleyes
    May 14, 2006
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    Although we seem to think that God doesn't hear our prayers, he really does! This reminds me of a song that was sung by a country music artist (I can't remeber the name though)The song is called Unanswered Prayers. When we think that God has forsaken us, we think that the world will come to an end,but you must remember that not only is everything done for a reason but that some of God's greatest gifts are unanswered prayers! Great job on the poem
    Hugs,
    Heather


  • dustookie2
    May 14, 2006
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    nicely penned

    you have crafted a good poem here in you words, full of imagery with such emotion, descriptive and expressive. There are some really nice lines too which i find very touching. good luck with the contest.


  • u took my user name
    May 14, 2006
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    you are so talented, that you make me feel so small... like... you could jut break me in little pieces. this is a wonderful write. lovely. wonderful word choice, and just... you express everything so clearly.
    best wishes
    L4L


  • Viyanna Rosemarie silver member
    May 14, 2006
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    oh my gosh timothy. you just have no clue how this touches my heart. i am so sorry that this pain is known to you. really. i am speechless other than that. sorry but i am. good luck in this contest and i know that God hears your prayers and this will be worked out for you in the end. viyanna rosemarie

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